You're right, we haven't talked in quite a while.
Do tell me though, if I remember right;
You didn't think the truth would stand your trial
And lied you'd written and I wouldn't write!
It seems to me that I was patient too.
But there is only so much one can take.
There's only so much you can misconstrue
Before a friendship, built on trust, will break.
And so it did. I won't deny all blame
Though I was not the instigator here.
I just lost interest in the drama game;
I'd lived too many days then tear by tear.
Now dare to prove it - that I write in lies!
If you can do that, I'll apologize.
Please tell me what you think
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What a wonderful line :"I'd lived too many days then tear by tear"! I love the tone of voice in the line "But there is only so much one can take". What an extraordinary sonnet!
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Thank you very much.
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A delicate and absorbing piece that manages, within the confines of the sonnet, to be liberated and accessible.
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Oh, excellent sonnet, but then you are Frodofan, and we expect nothing less then excellence from thee.... bravo...
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Wow!
this pieceof writing sounds good for me
keeep up the good writing work hon.
and thanks for sharing your personal poem.
bye the way I guess that Dude will write it......cuz the target is not to difficult!
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This is an interesting poem with some nice phrases but I think it would benefit from playing around with the line lenghts and punctuation to make it more accessible and add to the drama
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This is an interesting poem with some nice phrases but I think it would benefit from playing around with the line lenghts and punctuation to make it more accessible and add to the drama
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This is an interesting poem with some nice phrases but I think it would benefit from playing around with the line lenghts and punctuation to make it more accessible and add to the drama
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Thanks. It's a sonnet.
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Powerful tone Miss...I like that you put a response into a poem. You made the situation clear without being dull; nice work.
, Dannie
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