tethered to earth, like hawk to hand,
I strained against leathery bonds
so tired of being hand fed
when he lifted me and sent me on to forage,
expecting I would return
he forgot such wing-aching sorrow
can sometimes cause disobedience
and I flew
away from such control, and fear, and heartache
into a blue that was tinged with sunset’s blood
as it gave birth
to my freedom
that waited
Author notes
Carol Desjarlais
Prompt chosen - jpg - Full of Happiness by tostandalone @ deviantart
A contest entry
- Proudly Presenting: ROUND 2 (: by Walk-Free.
1500 points, ended October 7, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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congruatulations on making it to the next round!
here's the link of the last contest. please do enter because we have fallen in love with your poems (:
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wow. i love your work. you always never fail to astound me with your take on every prompt. i loved it tons.
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beautiful.
simple, passionate, and written so well. i like the structure of this, and the words to accomplany. great take on the picture... keep penning
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The story is very nice and it made the picture come alive!
the beauty of the picture shines through beautifully. 
The poem was not too long with good imagery. good luck!!
transit~
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There is such free movement between these lines - as so often from you, this is a marvel of metaphor.
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Taking steps it seems as first small then larger and finally the great leap to freedom, and the thoughts and will ...the real keys...wonderful...PK
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"and I flew
away from such control, and fear, and heartache"
i absolutely loved this.
it was short and simple, yet it exudes such... freedom
thanks so much for this brilliant entry!
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This is brilliant, it immeidately went to my heart and spirit, although I feel no fetters, perhaps I long for more freedom. The tribute to the senses is outstanding in this. This is a poem I shall return to again and again.
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Wow,
Very detailed and such wonderful content that flows so beautiful!
You did an excellent job here sweet soul, thanks for sharing.
All the best within the contest, and write on!
Peace, Timothy
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Sigh,,,
I cannot tell you how much I can relate to this right now and how much I needed to read this and KEEP reading it in the coming months...I am blessed to have found this which gave me strength when I was feeling so weakened...TY my friend for always providing such words of wisdom and strength even when you do not realize how much you are helping feed the souls of sisters
Lynda
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