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Long

He dances through the centre
with the ball in his hands,
the blue defence in front of him
standing there like cans.

He weaves and ducks between
them as if he were a ghost;
the defenders bob around him
like seaweed on the coast.

They try to bump him off his path
but knock team mates out instead
as he bounces his way towards goal -
a vision in his head.

Too far out from goal to score
he dodges like a rubber band;
with a body made of elastic
this amazing Rubber Man.

He squeezes past defenders
at full pace and full of pride
dodging sideways and then backwards
without breaking his stride.

He bounces the ball 4 times
screaming through the corridor
his goal an inspiration
and the crowd yells out for more.

So he gives them what they want
and what his team can lack;
his skills so full of magic
his heart as big as the outback.

He's the hero of a suburb,
of a club and of a race.
He called Howard a cold-hearted prick -
he said it to his face.

We wish that we could be like him
with convictions half as strong -
the defining image of football
our champion, Michael Long!


Myron Lysenko









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  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    June 11
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    Yeah, nothing quite like Aussie rules football eh?

    Cheers mate!


  • notorious
    September 5, 2008

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    "standing there like cans."
    All your similes feel like observations I wish I'd made... I think this works perfectly in its easy-to-imagine, non-confusing imagery.

    "like seaweed on the coast."
    Man...seaweed similes...how AWESOME.

    "as he bounces his way towards goal -
    a vision in his head."
    Honestly...that just makes me smile. It feels inspiring, like a bud of hope or something.
    The "in his head" feels optional to me--like, where else can a vision come from--your ass? I'd like it w/o those 3 words...but I'm fine with it there too. But then again...'head' rhymes with 'instead'.
    Don't mind me...

    "cold hearted"
    A hyphen??

    This is a nice poem.
    It makes me all...happy.
    Makes me want to watch TV & have bubble tea, to be honest...



    Jessica

    • myron silver member
      September 8, 2008

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      hyphen

      Ah yes - thanks heaps - I'll put that runaway hyphen back where she belongs.

      and i'll think more deeply about 'in his head' - i agree with you that it's redundant.

      I love your perceptions of this poem.
      Thank you very much,
      myron.

  • jodygirl
    September 5, 2008

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    Great display of a ball player during game time. You must have played at one point in time. You have played him perfectly. Good job.
    Joan

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