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The last note.

Hidden in mystic lyrics upon a butterflies wing
she sings out creating a melody
of haunting proportions.

Her audience flies patterns of elegance
across the night while writing words
of scorned dreams upon the beaming moon
a testament of failures, goals not reached.

Painting beauty upon every octave released.
she frees herself from the darkness
and unlocks her soul before it withers
upon the last note..

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Maldicion_Divina_by_medusa04@deviantart.com

Ok this really shows that my muse has died..lol.. But I tried!
Anyway.. AP- sister..

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  • Iridessa MoonFlower
    September 14, 2008

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    I can't understand why you think your muse is dead. This is really good. It is sad in a way. At least to me. Good luck in the contest. ~~Iridessa MoonFlower~~


  • nevadapoet
    September 14, 2008
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    wow...a beautiful write with vivid imagery...a perfect write for the prompt.
    Nevadapoet


  • Weltt
    September 8, 2008

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    Oooooo I love that picture and your poem definately does it justice. this is simply beautifully in a kind of sad and haunting way. best of luck Jet!!!


  • Danny Beatty gold member
    September 7, 2008

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    your last line ... you just perfectly defined music, and created a metaphore of the butterfly, otherwise known as resurrection ...

    i am so glad I made you a favorite

    threeturtlesealof


  • banrion
    September 7, 2008

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    oh! that is wonderful! You told a beautiful story about a beautiful picture! *hugs*

    SJ


    • Angelflower
      September 7, 2008
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      I tried.. my muse wouldn't move for this write..But I loved the picture too much to let it slip by.. Thanks for your kind comment! I'm glad you liked it! *hugs*


  • luna-midnight gold member
    September 7, 2008
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    this is pretty awesome, nicely done and good luck
    take care
    Stephanie ♥


  • Cannonsfire
    September 6, 2008

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    Pfft...nothing has left you you silly sissy! this was just lovely C


  • Shadow Lynx
    September 5, 2008

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    I think your muse is alive and kicking!
    Melodies of haunting proportions, i so love this opening stanza, it created a warm dark feel to the picture from the off, and slowly melted into the release of her soul. The last line, the last note and freedom, cleverly done, thank you for entering my new Sister


  • honorable mention
    September 5, 2008
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    I thought it was good.


  • notorious
    September 5, 2008
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    Kick-ass pic...lemme know when it's done


    • Angelflower
      September 5, 2008
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      Thank you.. It's done now.. but it sucks..lol. my muse has finally died..


      • Dorick
        September 5, 2008

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        I know that feeling, it can be more depressing than being depressed.
        Go find some cute guy, tie him down with rope, and force him to be inspirational.

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