Take my hand and walk with me. Hear my words and understand now is not the time of fear. I have taken many across this river. One day we shall meet but now is not the time. The present requires strength and thought. Through this meeting be healed. Find your inconquerable strength and live oncemore as intended.
A contest entry
- patsoldcat-- if you know him come write by rainyday woman.
300 points, ended September 25, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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What can I say, you already know what's going on with your dad, so I can't tell you anything new. Thanks for entering kiddo, I know you don't like to put too much on here, but hey it's good for you, just like brussel sprouts.
Cheryl
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Beautiful words of comfort for Al
Good Luck in the contest
~sugar~
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One thing hon you might want to think of structuring this like in stanza's Also:
"Through this meeting be healed."
this line seemed to disturb the flow alittle maybe change it to something like:
"Through this meeting might be healed."
It flows for the reader alittle more
miss ya hun!
all my love
kitty xxx
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