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do you see what i see?

window

 

 

Nocturnal symphony,

playing her hallelujah.

Trapped in her tower,

but can't let her hair down.

 

Purity and Blameless

reside outside the four walls and

present themselves to window sills.

 

Finding delight in hearing her

play her sweetest song,

 

like she's set on repeat.

 

 

Author notes

Pic Credit: Maldicion_Divina_by_medusa04@deviantart.com

AP Family Member: Cousin

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  • Elfin
    September 10, 2008

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    I love the differences that each poet sees in the same picture and yours is a lovely take on this one. Well done and good luck in the contest. Val


  • penman gold member
    September 6, 2008
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    Excellent

    Wow, terrific verse. And so deserving of the trophy. Congratulations on the gold


  • DarkHunter
    September 5, 2008
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    that is THE most amazing picture I have ever seen


  • DarkHunter
    September 5, 2008
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    wow, incredible picture and poem. so much depth, is a work of art.

    thank you for entering


  • Kiss the girl--x
    September 5, 2008

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    I loved the reference to rapunzel, and her tower.
    and I think the last line is so so effective, especially written in italics.

    this went with the picture beautifully

    ♥


  • Brooklynn Tainted gold member
    September 5, 2008

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    Wow this goes so good with that picture. I love the refrence of the "letting your hair down". This was a great write keep it up :]


  • Shadow Lynx
    September 5, 2008

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    Thank you cousin for entering. The opening stanza was enchanting and the rest of the poem flowed beautifully from it with a cleverly done last line, a most enjoyable read


  • Little Miss Mental
    September 5, 2008
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    This is wonderful...very sweet and kinda sorta dramatic. Very beautiful!


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    September 4, 2008

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    This indeed is beautiful my dear.
    Loved the detail and emotion you whipped up in this.
    Wonderful job.

    Good luck to you in the contest

    Love
    Passion


  • Angelflower
    September 4, 2008

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    How beautiful! You really did such a wonderful job with this picture! your just a cousin to everyone huh? I loved how you brought emotion into the picture.. Best of luck cousin!


    Angel

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