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the gloves come off

 

She speaks, but never listens.
Verbalize her rebellion
and dates its brother.
All to the beat of fabulous dramatics
and causes for concern.

Bleak hope and shallow dreams
make wishes on timelines.

Picking flowers from gardens
of everyone's heart.
Causes time to time-out
and makes money it's leader.

Climb the ladder
and swandive off.
It's makes the innocent look guilty
and gives crime the night off.

 

 

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Interpret this however you choose.

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  • karabi
    September 14, 2008

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    EXCELLENT

    I was in two minds - to click or not to click. Fortunately I clicked, otherwise I would have missed a unique poem. The author views 'her' both comically and satirically but with utter tolerance. The sketch of her character made in these few lines is very very apt using words and expressions like the brush strokes of a master artist. A superb poem, enjoyed enormously.


  • Chrispm84
    September 14, 2008

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    Nice. I'm still trying to understand it, but it's nicely written and flows well. The rhyming is smooth. I really can't find anything bad about it. Kudos! And good luck!


  • Dorick
    September 13, 2008
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    Lol, sounds like teenage drama from my sister...


  • etoile
    September 6, 2008

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    i like this.
    especially the third and last stanza.
    it really made me think about things.

    thanks for entering and goodluck


  • penman gold member
    September 6, 2008

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    Wonderful

    Another well crafted and masterful creation. Such skillful use of wording. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Stormy Days
    September 5, 2008

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    i love the first stanza the rest is amazing but the first is the best this is really well wrote and has really good detail
    Thanks For Entering
    ~Mystal~


  • Brooklynn Tainted gold member
    September 5, 2008

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    Oooo i like this. You said to interpret anyway so i went the simple way and thought about it discribing a girl...I see a girl scared and alone...Gah!! to much detail sorry lol. I really like this though and i love the first two lines and the last two. Deffinetly my favorite parts :] Sorry for the long message but i love the poem.


  • Kiss the girl--x
    September 5, 2008

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    'Climb the ladder
    and swandive off.
    It's makes the innocent look guilty
    and gives crime the night off.'

    that ending is amazing, I love your use of imagery,
    and the line 'make wishes on timelines.'

    ♥

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