I want to look inside your eyes and see in inside your soul
i want to taste the saltiness of your silky skin
i want my hands to wonder all over you
and make you moan in ecstacy.
Please make me as hot as i make you
passion and heat
through .
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very nice here i think you did a very great excellent job with this here poem here it was a pleasure to read
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Great write
Simple yet vast with meaningful emotion.
There's some writing that leaves you with little to the imagination, describing every detail, letting you float on it like a dream as you read, there's some writing that leaves you confused and wondering, describing too little, not giving enough for the reader to thrive on. Then there's some writing that has perfect balance between, sucks the reader in, giving a beginning, middle, and letting the reader come up with there own end, that's the type I like best, lets me relate closely as the other types cannot.
Once again,
Great write
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Hot!
I love it. The sensual message here was perfect in my opinion. It is a wonderful feeling in knowing that you are the reason that your hearts desire has lost all reasoning. great write.
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I don't know ... the write seems to contradict itself. It feels like you're the one that is hot and you want to make him/her as hot as you are. "Let me make you as hot as I am" might be better. ?
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wow
you got everything in it
to seduce and get the response back
what a nice poem it is
the structure is also very attractive
i really liked it
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very good, short simple and too the point.strong emotions, keep writing!
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SWEET!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
i love the way you put the words just right thanks for submiting!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! -
Wow....very seductive. The heat is definitely on!
Oh and I like your nic name.
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thank you very much
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spectacular
wow, thats exactly how I feel.. so much passion, so intense.
I loved it!!!
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:] niceeee
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Marvelous... You've captured the emotion trickling through your fingertips... Good job keep it up.
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Wow...
How do you know my skin is rather salty?
I'd love you to moan for such a beauty....
Erotic, indeed!
Kisses all over....
Galaxy2
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thank you , nice pic
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I found L5 to be ever so telling in this poem. It hints of self-confidence issues or someone going through the motions and wishing there was more. Your last line leaves us dangling with a single word, a space and a period. Why the space? Through what? We are left to wonder... Speaking of wonder, do you really mean "wander" in L3? I like the shape of this--the way the lines form triangles. Good to see you writing still!
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i guess you could be right about L5 but i wouldnt want to elaborate... thanks for reading
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well lol..... hehe this was ummmmmm whats the word... well just know i liked it... heheh.... thanks for sharing this.....
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thank you
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SO SULTRY AND PASSIONATE!!!
Just the way two in love should make each other feel.
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Thanks alot Kevin it means so much.
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