ask of me what you will
I will be your crucified jew
and wear my harlequin smile
dance with limbs akimbo
with barbed wire as my crown
ask of me what you will
I will play the apostle card
and bleed for your inquisition
tearing pages from the torah
where the bones of your christ lay
ask of me what you will
I will be your concentration camp face
staring blankly through the wire
as you march upon my soul
on your way to glory be
ask of me what you will
I will be you mccarthy clown
as I gather all the other jews
who have sympathy for the crown
worn by the new tsars
ask of me what you will
I will change your aging face
hiding all your sins of old
by stitching new foreskins in its place
and standing silent in your grace
ask of me what you will
I will be your kicking jew
and you can blame me for all your woes
as you surely will
with my twisted limbs akimbo...
A contest entry
- Insanity-no rules just write by catalyst..
315 points, ended September 11, 2008, 13 entries
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Comments
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This was a very out-of-the-ordinary entry, which is what I like to see. Your imagery was great, but I am questioning the flow... maybe it's just because I'm not much of a freeverse person. I am going to DQ this, not because I think it's bad, but because it is not a style of writing I like to read. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Thank You 4 Entering our Contest Project Un-Cliche
Hello there I am a judge for the contest above and I like your poem here. I am mildly suprised at how well a little spiritual poem can be but then again I am very impressed with how the flow of your poem went. any ways an over all well penned poem that shows off what exactlyw as taking place and your words really place excellent imagery through out the poem. any ways good work and good luck in the contest(s) -
I like the repitition of the first line it gave it a great flow
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