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Cosmic Waves

       Pondering
         the complexity
          of just being me.

Spiritual side
evolving,
synchromaticly.

         Universe's ebb
            and flow
             generate life's
                              tide.


Powerful forces,
from which
you can not hide.

       Unlock your mind,
           throw away
               the key.

           Let it languish....
                ...amidst
                     the cosmic sea.

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Connecting and re-connecting

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  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    September 6, 2008

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    "Cosmic sea" -
    I love that.

    While it isn't the most original topic - you shed new light on it with your unique style and wonderful words (of course, are there really any original topics left? I mean, hasn't it all been written about before?)

    I just love the swaying flow of your poetry. The lines wave like a gentle sea...


  • aboomer silver member
    September 6, 2008

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    I love your wording in this! So simple, yet complex in itself also. I love your title. I especially like,

    'Unlock your mind,
    throw away
    the key.

    Let it languish....
    ...amidst
    the cosmic sea.' - just a beautiful image!!
    best wishes in your contest.


  • AutumnsFlame
    September 6, 2008

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    I like the whole idea of the poem and I think the structure of it really makes it interesting. I usually don't like freeverse, but I really like the imagery in this poem. You pretty much painted a picture in my head, so great job. Thank you for entering my contest and congradulations on staying in it!