Hope you are
grand
grander than grand
actually
Thinking of you is
like
spending pennies for
diamonds
My heart spilling
over
thoughts, words, voices
longing
May you return to me
soon
sooner than soon
so my heart will be complete
Author notes
Without love there is only longing. Love is not always happy. It is sad sometimes, but still, hope is that which makes love last.
Two Poem Links:
"i carry your heart with me"
by e e cummings http://www-scf.usc.edu/~thier/ee/#yourheart
"White Snow "
by Esther Blanco http://www.poetry.com/dotnet/P6612488/BAV/1/display.aspx
A contest entry
- 'i love you' by Naridill.
650 points, ended September 15, 2008, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Give me a critical thought.
Comments
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Wow
I feel you do excellent when you write in a constricted sense, I haven't read much of your poetry, but I get the feeling that you tend to express yourself more when you are limited, as you were in this contest. I don't know how to explain myself properly and I'm making this very long so all I'm going to say is that you did a spectacular job!
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I am smiling. I feel like I've just stumbled upon a treasure chest. It is so very exciting to find a poet who writes the way you do. This has a sing-song feel
to it, and even though it is full of longing, you didn't fall back on cliche - bravo, dear Poet. You now have a fan in me. Love, Lane
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