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Step-Daddy Dearest

Step-daddy dearest,
I know you love me so,
You call me daughter,
And to parks we like to go.

Step-daddy dearest,
I know you love me so,
That is why you only touch me,
When Momma isn't home.

Step-daddy dearest,
I know you love me so,
You tell me you won't hurt me,
But to keep my mouth closed.

Step-daddy dearest,
I know you love me so,
Please tell me,
Step-daddy dearest,
Where did you go?

Author notes

This poem is a twist on the tradition "Daddy dearest" It shows how a young girl is being convinced (by her step-father) that this is okay and that he is doing it because he loves her, the last line shows how when the girl becomes older and separates from the abuse/abuser, she constantly feels alone. It is hard to understand unless you have gone through it I guess.

I am passionate about this issue, no child ever needs to go through this, the emotional scars last far longer than the mans sick moment of pleasure

Mood: Used

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  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    July 18

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    Ok. Here are my thoughts.
    Without the author notes, I was reading with my mouth open. Not out of shock, because I've seen this time and time again. But, the ending, "where did you go?"... It's like the abused needs the comfort and feeling of love from the abuser. It's twisted but I honestly believe that one can learn to love the abuser, not even "think" they love them, but honestly, from the bottom of their heart. A lot of people disagree, but that's why I said these are my thoughts.
    As for your author notes, you haven't included the option number but you have explained the option so I'm allowing this.

    I'm adding you to the finalists list. You know I've read so many pieces on the matter, for this contest but also in the past, and sure so many of them feel real, and take me to their state of mind... but none have shown my own thoughts concerning the ending of this piece. You provide something different and I respect that.
    Thank you for the entry.


  • Frances Nightengale
    January 15

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    God, I could almost cry. That sounds really lame, i know. But this is me. Absolutely. Except it was my father. I loved this poem.


    • hotpinkpenguin
      January 16
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      Thank You

      Thank you, and I am sorry that you had to go through this as well, but I am glad that you can relate to this.


  • Afallenangel
    November 14, 2008

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    This is very true and you captured the emotions of it perfectly. Although I hate to admit it and up until a few weeks ago I was afraid and ashamed to admit that I am a victim of sexual abuse. I know I am not alone but it is hard to accept it and to not wonder why it happened to us?

    • hotpinkpenguin
      November 14, 2008
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      Thank you for reading and commenting, I really appreciate it. I am sorry that you had to experience this and I hope that you continue to get stronger.

  • bebe314
    November 3, 2008
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    is this true...and its kind of confusing


  • FallenAngelWings
    October 11, 2008

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    very good

    I read this and it touched a part of me I hate to talk about. I know exactly how you feel though. Good job portraying it.


  • Rock-Junkie
    September 28, 2008

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    wow :]
    I really don't know what to say...
    it shows how it Is to be used, and to know that any child has to go through this.. it's really such a sad experience.
    and I agree 100% with your Author Notes. Anything that is sexually abusing can destroy anyone's view on life, and it should be ended.
    great job and good luck!!


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    September 14, 2008

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    This is a clear and thoughtful poem. You express yourself well. I hope you continue to write and grown on this site.

    Great job.

    Mike

  • Writing0Freedom
    September 14, 2008

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    Beautiful poem you conveyed a very powerful message. No c hild should suffer the affects of this.
    WritingFree


  • MrsJones
    September 14, 2008

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    Great poem, and really talks about sensitive and horrible issue. I think child molestation is so horrendous, and like you said no child should ever have to feel those effects. Thank you so much for submitting.


  • Stars-Get-Dim
    September 14, 2008

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    An amazing write. It's horrible that people can do this but it seems to be a reaccuring factor in today's life.

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