i get paranoid
whenever someone says
hey it can’t rain all the time
as if my thoughts strolled
around without panties
and they found that
necklace of valium
i suck on
after trying to rape a moment
and know i have failed
because it’s still
smiling
and you’d be surprised to know
that milk goes best with guilt
because bourbon is too pompous
for anything less than satisfaction
and gin couldn’t give a damn about
anyone except for sex
and sweet sherry
she of amber legs just wants to sit
and murmur about how many times
you said you tried to say
goodbye
well then
fry me another egg
and we’ll agree that tabasco and dog hairs
are what make stairs forgive
saturday beds and our impulsive weight
and here i thought only the dead rattle chains
but haven’t i said enough
confessed with joni’s voice
that yes
part of me pours out of you
from these lives from time to time
and it’s so true
i am in your blood
hailed taxis inside arteries
to swell you from balls to bones
it would be all so simple
if you were not a woman
&
if i wasn’t a man
so i’ll leave it at that
night has nearly finished
picking her scabs
and i’m just about done smoking
someone else’s last cigarette
the bedside lamp is bored of this story
and i am left to gather my only consolation
my only constellation
that for someone who can say
they have no regrets
is simply stating
they have never drawn breath
Author notes
Yeah...
NOTES: Some parts quoted from Joni Mitchell's 'A Case of You'.
A contest entry
- dragging a dead deer up a hill by the atlantic.
1000 points, ended September 16, 2008, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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this is awesome. thanks for sharing.
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thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed.
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holy shit. this is fab.
helen~
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"Dear God"
Jesus, I just don't know what to say... your word usage... the imagery. You have always been one of my favorite poets on this site, you have such insight with your words. I can't believe this only merited a bronze... I relate so fully to this piece, I think you almost captured an image of my life, although we've never met and I'm a woman. All I can really say is thank you for this piece and Jesus, I'm f'ing impressed!
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Wow! Do people's thoughts normally wander around without panties? That was a great image, if you can't tell. I read this one the other day and I still have that stuck in my head. lol Though the people isn't really happy, so I don't want you to think I'm laughing at you or anything like that. I just found the tone engaging and the images really stark. You did a good job on this.
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I could read a case of you, and be knocked off my feet. Wonderful, again.
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this is perfect.
you are amazing competition.
i seriously can not explain how intense this made me feel and how just...wonderful it is.
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You are one of a kind lady...
And soooooooo distinctive in your voice.
can I play inside your head for an hour or two....please
good good GREAT poetry!
♥Becky♥
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Excellent! This was sensational!
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Outstandingly spoken, those last four lines left the carcass at the top of the hill after you dragged your way there with such style. Kudos.
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Wow!...lol nothing articulate but WOW!
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Wow, this is the first thing I ever read of yours and it is...wow! Raw emotion screaming off the screen. Great job!
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i meant fuck not uck haha
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the bedside lamp is bored of this story
dear fuck, haha. how one line can send me shivers. literally. this is raw, i love it. i love poems that scream
uck!!!
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Incredible.
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You are really too good to me. And here I was hoping to get a smack from you on how to make this better!
Thank you.
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sooooooooooooooooo gorgeous i can't wait until i can comment properly
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