Visions of blue, grey, and green surround me.
Cradled in the branches of the ancient trees.
Rocked ever so gently to sleep by the wind.
Blanketed with the stars.
Kept warm by the light of the moon.
Comforted by the whispers of the spirits
As they tell secrets of old.
Here is where I feel most at Home.
Lost in your patient brown eyes.
Held up by the strength of your heart.
Kept warm by your smile.
Comforted by the softness of your touch.
Protected by the shield of your arms.
Here is where I feel most Loved.
Drowning in the scent of jasmine.
Shown the way by the light of the moon.
Kept company by the shadows.
Captured by the shimmering waters.
Listening to the secrets of the wind.
Comforted by the feel of dewy grass beneath my bare feet.
Here is where I feel most at Peace.
Hidden deep within the labyrinth of my thoughts.
Protected in the shadows of my heart.
Comforted by thoughts of you.
Here is where I feel Safest.
Voices ringing in the air.
Humid air from peoples breath makes breathing impossible.
Darting eyes and unfocused attention.
Curled in a ball sitting in the corner.
The smell of burning candles permeates the air.
Prickling skin and hair on end.
Quiet suffocates the roar.
This is where I feel most Alone.
All of this is part of me.
The parts of me not many know.
All of this describes me.
Here is who I am.
A contest entry
- Anything you wish by thepoetssoul.
1000 points, ended September 7, 2008, 14 entries
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Comments
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I really liked the structure of this piece, the way you kept it the same and varied it for the penultimate stanza, I also rounded the poem off, it really seemed to tie in and bring the piece to an solid ending which really captured the ideas. You created some lovely images throughout the piece, some of my favourite lines were "Held up by the strength of your heart./
Kept warm by your smile." These were really magically ways of showing the power that other people can have on us. This was a really great way to share the essence of you, Great work x
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Wow you really described yourself
in such depth with emotions just
pouring. This was a very beautiful
write & a treasure to read.
I guess we learn something
new everday.
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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Thank you for this wonderful entry into my contest.The imagery is very good and carries me right into the story.All the little parts to who you are BRAVO!!!
Splendidly done indeed best of wishes to you.
Tony
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