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Birth Mark

    She quietly closed the master bedroom door behind her. Pausing for a brief moment, she admired the richness of the polished grains in the heavy black walnut door. Such luxury should have been hers all along. Turning as she wiped the tears from her cheek, like a slow motion dream, she made her way down a marble stairway lined with family portraits which so sadly all lacked, one forgotten soul! Too late her discovery for the fairytale dream had just died. Laid to rest, behind a black walnut door. She wept in the knowledge that it would never come true! 

 

    At the bottom of the grand stairway, refracted light reflecting off the facets of the crystal chandelier, had mesmerized her, she stopped in her tracks, recall far from euphoric… Of her early years rushed in, overwhelming her, as it brought her back to life’s earliest memories.

   

    The orphanage had not been a kind place to grow up in. Little Lilly Smith’s heart had progressively hardened as another year passed without her emotional needs ever being met. On her thirteenth birthday when the hopes and dreams of adoption were all but gone, the tone of her guardians turned a darker side of cruel. For five more years, each and every night, the tears ran off her cheek, staining her pillow. With her last conscious thought before falling to sleep being…”Even Cinderella had a Fairy Godmother”

 

    On her eighteenth birthday, the orphanage doors closed behind her, as she stepped out onto the mean streets of Philadelphia and didn’t feel the brotherly love! She felt very little if nothing at all. With a sigh, a sad smile formed on her face, yet still a glimmer of hope shown in her eyes.

 

    The night before her exodus from this house of lost souls, had been spent picking the lock, which opened the door leading to the possibility of her dreams being realized. The administrative office harbored a computer with a database containing the true identity of each orphan. Listed next to their names were the names of the birth parents and their addresses. From this she gleaned her mother’s name, but her father had remained a mystery.
Her mother sadly, had died in childbirth. Lilly had been conceived and born out of wedlock. She always knew she was a bitch and now she understood why she had been put up for adoption. The family didn’t want the scandal that would have accompanied the new addition to the Wellington family.

 

    Undaunted by her mothers death; she still had an address as a clue to search for her father. The orphanage had given her five hundred dollars and paid for three months rent at a flop house room, on the seedy side of town. After six months of working as a waitress in a greasy spoon diner, her aspirations for a higher station in life took a step down. Lilly decided to join the stable of call girls at the Top Shelf Escort Service, down the street from where she lived.

   

    There were two reasons why she had surrendered her virtues, values and morals. The most immediate reason was to get her out of this hellhole she was living in. A nicer neighborhood would come with the dramatically increased income she would enjoy from her new position! The second reason and more important of the two, was the neighborhood this escort service catered to, Philadelphia’s Main Line. A community where all the well to do high society types resided, which just happened to be where her dead mothers address was located!

 

    Lilly had done quite well for herself in the past ten years since taking the job at the escort service and now was part of the management team. This gave her the privilege to pick and choose assignments of her liking. One day a call came in, for an in home appointment in one of the most affluent sections of the main Line. This happened all the time and she would have thought nothing of assigning this out to one of the younger more energetic girls at the service. But the clients name had caught her vigilant eye, Robert J. Wellington III and the address was the same as her dead mother, Sara Wellington. Before going on the appointment Lilly went on line and researched his identity only to discover that he was Sara’s Brother…Her Uncle. After ten years of working at an escort service, she knew no shame and was willing to do whatever it took to find her father. Including servicing her Uncle Robert!

 

    The Yellow Cab turned into the driveway past the fine trimmed lawn and the formally pruned bushes and trees and around to the service entrance in the rear of the mansion. The house staff and all deliveries passed through that rear door. She was met there by Robert Wellington’s personal valet, who was waiting to escort her up to the master bedroom. Lilly handed the cab driver a crisp new one hundred-dollar bill and told him to wait, then she turned, nodded to the valet and followed him through the kitchen up the back stairs that led to the second floor and the master bedroom.

 

    She was told to wait by the door and the valet disappeared behind it. About a minute passed while she waited. The door opened, he exited and held it long enough for her to enter, closing it tightly behind her. The room was dimly lit and she needed a moment for her eyes to adjust. When they did, what she saw was the frail body of a once powerful man. To his right was an oxygen tank and his nightstand couldn’t have held one more prescription bottle. Lilly was surprised not to see a nurse sitting by his side.

 

    Moving towards the bed, she reached around to the back of her neck and pulled the bow tie holding up her black dress. As the knot came loose, the dress tumbled down all around her, as it piled up on the floor at her feet. Climbing onto the bed, she cautiously mounted his frail body. He may have been bed ridden, but there was one part of his body that still worked just fine.
Caught up in the excitement of being this much closer to finding her father along with the kinky thrill of servicing her Uncle... had completely aroused her. As the pressure built up in him, his moaning got louder, exciting her all the more. Simultaneously as he reached climax, she matched him in her orgasm. Collapsing on the bed beside him, Lilly panted for a minute until she caught her breath. Lilly sat up and turned on the nightstand light closest to her and that’s when it happened...

 

    Robert Wellington’s eyes grew very wide as he reached out to touch the scarlet birthmark of a crescent moon on Lilly’s left breast. His face was contorting amidst the agony of a sudden heart attach. Clutching his left breast, his final breath hissed out of his mouth as his lungs deflated. Death came and his left hand and arm fell slack onto the bed, revealing to Lilly an identical birthmark to the one she carried. The shocking realization of who he really was…Raced through her and she nearly collapsed!

   

    Robert Wellington’s personal valet found her at the bottom of the steps in a trance, staring at the chandelier. He touched her shoulder and startled her back to the present. Then he escorted her through the house and out the service entrance to the waiting taxi. The valet shut the door of the taxi, once he saw that she had been seated properly.

 

    A sad smile shown on her face as the cabby slowly pulled away, she thought to herself… I always knew I was a bitch…Just not one born of incest! Lilly Wellington turned for one last look at her fairytale life turned nightmare. A single tear rolled down her cheek as she said…Goodbye Daddy.

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  • DancingStar
    October 23

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    Wow this was an extremely long poem, well a story really. I didn't read all of it, didn't really need to because after the first three paragraphs I knew this was a good piece, congrats on getting through to round

  • This doesn't seem to really fit into my contest, it loosely, very loosely, fits my prompt but it isn't really what I'm looking for. I don't like erotica either which doesn't help matters any on your behalf. This is well written though even though it isn't a poem. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.

  • OMG WOW...heart shatteringly sad and painful. You are a great writer, not good, GREAT!


  • Antebellum
    July 3
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    "A sad smile shown on her face as the cabby slowly pulled away, she thought to herself… I always knew I was a bitch…Just not one born of incest! Lilly Wellington turned for one last look at her fairytale life turned nightmare. A single tear rolled down her cheek as she said…Goodbye Daddy. "

    More of a short story than a poem. but I enjoyed reading it.
    Chilling,
    thanks for entering.


  • cazzy71
    July 1
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    Tremendous effort

    This was such an interesting read,but I feel that although you put so much effort and feeling into this,it is not my idea of a poem.The content is extremely high though,and I would usually disregard entries like this,but I am going to make this an exception.A rare exception,for an exceptional piece of artistic brilliance.

  • Ummm Perfect, that's all I can say....

    Favorite lines
    " A sad smile shown on her face as the cabby slowly pulled away, she thought to herself… I always knew I was a bitch…Just not one born of incest! Lilly Wellington turned for one last look at her fairytale life turned nightmare. A single tear rolled down her cheek as she said…Goodbye Daddy. "

  • this is long but nice!!!


  • wow, this was really good. it was chilling and full of mystery and was very weird at the end. I never expected what happened in the end either!!

  • WOW,you put this story to the test as his life was his last effort to have a blast going out in this life, but to find he messed with his own wow, that was a low blow. thank you for sharing
    Good luck
    Linda


  • daviscth silver member
    May 26

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    I got so caught up in this story it took me a moment to realize it had ended!! I loved the imagery and the twist at the end. Thanks for sharing with us.

  • great write! I'm glad i allowed pre-writes now. The twist was brilliant. lol
    Thank you for entering and good luck!

    ~Always Dancing.


  • azlyn gold member
    April 24
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    A most dark story. The end is very sad indeed. Thank you so much for your entry....


    Azlyn

  • piccola silver member
    March 7

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    I thought maybe a long lost twin brother ... her a high priced hooker. The valet shut door of taxi, once he saw that she had been seated properly. I think this needs a couple of 'the' somewhere in there.


    • BluesMan gold member
      March 7
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      OMG I can't believe I missed thoes two "the's" Thank you so much for pointing them out. Other than the missing "the's" what did you think of this piece?

      • piccola silver member
        March 7
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        you should submit it to a magazine. just google short story submissions or something. A mag like Playboy or something might just love it.

  • long but good thank u 4 sharing good luck

    by:
    serenity silvermoon

  • Oh wow.This was long but amazing. Im glad i made it to the end. You have some amazing imagery. and this truly is unusual. It is sad. The way you describd things like the door was brilliant.
    thankyou for entering

    love lithium


  • Ebbing.X.Discreetly
    September 20, 2008

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    A thoroughly unexpected story but very well thought and written. Beautiful language and ideas. Well done! Thanks for your entry and good luck!


  • Manoj Sanyal
    September 14, 2008
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    Nice story..
    Thanks for your participation.
    Good luck,


  • trista gold member
    September 7, 2008

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    Hi Bill

    Wow, am I ever impressed with your ability to grab my attention and KEEP it! I had a slight pause in your first paragraph...wondering who "she" is...I think even giving us her name right away would be a good idea, otherwise I'm left hanging until the 3d paragraph...and even then I had to make sure "Little Lilly Smith" was "her"...but once I got past that, yeah. I was totally engrossed in what was coming next.

    As Julie (islekine) mentioned, there are a few things that could tighten this up, but most are small, as I think your basics are very good. I don't want to pick apart all your punctuation/grammar etc. so just a few of the main ones I see in the first few paragraphs, that you might want to consider editing...
    P1, "which so sadly all lacked, one forgotten soul! Too late her discovery..." I would trim/edit this to, "which sadly lacked one forgotten soul. Too late, (comma) her discovery for the fairytale dream had just died (comma) laid to rest (removed comma) behind..." That also takes care of the one incomplete sentence you had. Be careful with the use of exclamation points...they are easily over-used, often in an attempt to create a sense of drama or excitement...and I didn't feel the one there was necessary, maybe even a bit awkward because it's telling me to be kinda excited, or that the preceding sentence was of great importance, when to me it was a pretty simple statement that spoke for itself. (Which is a good thing!) The exclamation point at the end of the paragraph is better placed, but it too could simply be a period. Strictly MO though.

    P2 I found a tad bit confusing. I think if you read it out loud to yourself, you'll easily see where a word needs to be added or subtracted, just to give a bit more clarity.

    P4, "She felt very little, (comma) if nothing" I think you want "anything" instead of "nothing". Also..."shown" did you mean "shone"?

    P8, There's a change in tenses here...since you are "flashing back" to an earlier time to things that have already happened...I'd suggest something like, " The most immediate reason (had been) to get out of (the) hellhole (she'd been) living in. A nicer neighborhood (had come) with the dramatically increased income she enjoy(ed) from her new position." And again...be wary of too many exclamation points.

    There are a few others, but letting a story sit for a time and then going back to search out all the small details that need editing usually works to make them more visible...for me, anyway. If you plan to polish this up, that's my best advice.

    As for the plot...Julie mentioned one area you might want to think on, and I wondered about Lilly's encounter with her uncle. It seemed the valet should have perhaps said something to her, to prepare her for what she was going to find...as a man in bed hooked up to an oxygen tank can't be a "normal" service call??? Not that I would know, but it'd be my guess. (and hope, lol) That would also give you an opportunity to inject a bit of dialogue into the story...which I just now realized there's little, if any, of. Not that it's crucial to have, but I think it brings readers further into a story and feel more connected to it. Again...just MO.

    Okay, wow...I think I'll leave any other areas of concern for Bear to follow up on. All in all...you've done a really nice job with this, and I definitely enjoyed the read.

    Thanks so much for your entry, and good luck in the contest. My scores will follow in the final notes.

    Best wishes,
    ~J.
    P.S. OH...just looking at the categories you've put this into...perhaps think about putting it in "adult"...and possibly "abuse" as well...just because there is adult content and incest...which is a very delicate subject to some of the AP readers. You did a good job of keeping it from sounding completely sordid though, and I for one appreciate that.


  • islekine gold member
    September 7, 2008

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    Aloha Bill!!



    What a tale you tell…..
    I like the way you started in the present, and went back….
    and brought us back again….you have a few stumbling blocks…

    The orphanage had not been a kind place to grow up in. Little Lilly Smith’s heart had progressively hardened as another year passed without her emotional needs ever being met. On her thirteenth birthday when the hopes and dreams of adoption were all but gone, the tone of her guardians turned a darker side of cruel. For five more years, each and every night, the tears ran off her cheek, staining her pillow. With

    You don’t need the “in” in the first sentence. I think “each” year would read a bit better…tone of her
    guardians turned to “a” darker side of cruel? Each and every…is redundant….either one would suffice…
    IMHO…..these are just small things I would do to make the write even better….
    I am still wondering…if she looked up her mother…why in the world didn’t she find her “father” or
    “uncle” as she knew him….that part totally doesn’t make sense to me….
    I believe the proper term for a child…male or female born out of wedlock is bastard…not bitch…

    There were two reasons why she had surrendered her virtues, values and morals.
    This is a broad sentence…with no explanation….
    I must say, this left me with a lasting image of what the girl went through….tightened
    up a bit, it could be a great story…..not bad the way it stands now….I’m sure Bear and Trista
    will point out more ways to make this a tighter write!
    Best wishes in the contest…
    Write on and on!
    My score will come in the final notes…
    REMEMBER: No editing once a judge has commented on your entry.


  • Rovingone gold member
    September 5, 2008

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    Well, now that was an unexpected read. I must say, that deserves to be written as a chapter in a book. I would certainly love to see how the whole thing developed. You have a fine command of the idea of authoring a moving story. Good work.


  • aboomer silver member
    September 5, 2008

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    Definitely full of impact - and sadness on the lives of the 'forgotten', the lost ones. Full of great descriptions!
    Don't forget to put SOM and theme in your AN's....
    best wishes in the contest

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