I saw some red tiles in a grid pattern in the hallway.
They seemed familiar, like a reflection.
They were red with a different blackened effect on each one.
No two were the same.
Most were equally shaded, more or less;
some were very dark, darker than all others.
The ones that looked purest even had barely detectable tainted markings.
It made me think of how we all end up in rows on the ground,
side by side and far apart.
Author notes
I thought of this while sitting outside my university's counseling center.
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I'm with my friend Heroesrox.
You have quite the fascinating mind. I could see these tiles you spoke of in my mind's eye, and I was greatly intruiged by the path your thoughts took from the appearance of them. I was especially drawn to the second line.
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A thinker for sure! ANother great write, my brother! Thanks so much for penned brilliance!
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Thank you for enjoying it.
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Great, it makes the reader think, and that is my favorite thing to read in a poem. You are a wonderful poet!
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Thank you very much. ^_^
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to write in prose/freeverse is the most honest way to create poetry.... not through all that rhyme fluff and acrostic crap (not dissin just saying- cause i rhyme occassionally too) your poetic thoughts here speak almost like a dawning epiphany. especially the last lines "It made me think of how we all end up in rows on the ground,
side by side and far apart" - true and depressing... you should check out my piece 'genocide' similiar meaning.... just different way to view. all in all... excellently written. keep it up. -T
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Sorry I haven't responded in so long...thank you for your great comment. And I will.
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It sounds more like a thought than a poem but it's good.... it's different
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Well, thanks.
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I like this, i like how it reminds of how even the most innocent and honesty people have secrets or hidden things in their past. Nice work
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Thank you. I thought it was pretty cool how even inanimate things like tiles can resemble us.
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Yeah its funny how many things can acctually resemble us. If you think about it nearly everything can resemble us in someway even if you have to think out side the box!
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I really like the style of this, so casual and yet so deep. A great piece to read aloud and then ponder.
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Thank you for enjoying it and commenting. I appreciate it.
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