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With My Own Eyes

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Old houses have spirits within,

souls left behind.
It's a feeling like no other to be touched by them,
as it happened to me that's right .

It was on one evening in this house we chose,
I was typing and was all alone.
I felt a touch upon my neck I quite can't explain,
and I brushed the thought off but it touched me again.

Confused I got up fast and looked all around,
nothing was there and I wondered how.
I moved to another spot and it never returned,
but it did cause me to have great concern .

One night my dog when I was sleeping began to growl,
I rose up and as I opened my eyes was wowed.
For at the end of the living room looked like covered with a web,
yet it was moving more like milk running down.

I turned on the light to get a better look,
and it was gone and I was very shook.
I left that light on all night indeed,
for I was by myself I felt this I didn't need.

You see this old house was and old army  hut,
and I felt from way back then someones life had been given up.
For the house after that moment seemed free indeed,
or maybe that ghost in this house decided to allow me .

Author notes

I never felt this or seen anything like this for a long time yet once I was walking to the bathroom in an old house where my Mom and Dad lived and bumped into someone while going to the bathroom. I apologized the next day and all those there said itr wasnt me . It wasnt the first time it had happened there but they didnt worry about it and my Mom just replied hes a harmless wondering soul in need of good company

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  • maralisa silver member
    September 5, 2008

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    a brilliant take on the promt chills the spine from the beginging to the end full of vivid imagery good luck in the contest


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    September 4, 2008

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    YOU GAVE ME CHILLS I LOVE GHOST STORIES. THEY HAVE INTEREST ME EVEN AS A CHILD ALTHOUGH I HAVE NONE OF MY OWN.
    I LOVE YOUR STORIES ALWAYS WONDERFULLY VIVID
    GOD BLESS MY ANGELIC FRIEND...


  • Karlie67
    September 4, 2008

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    What can I say this is a fantastic penn, so grabbing and full of emotion, I love it & I love how you have explained things in your notes. Fab. Good luck in the contest & well done!