Time elapses; trepidatingly, excruciatingly
It drips from its continuum to surround us
Forcing us forward, willingly or not
Inexorably toward our future destinies
Like ants in an anthill we march forward
Unaware of the gargantuan forces surrounding us
We trudge through our days, with or without purpose
Lost in our own thoughts, oblivious
Its force absolute, but yet, perspectively variable
Individually crawling by or speeding forward
Caught up in its web we struggle forward
Or are swept unwillingly by its mach force
Invariably we are subjects to its power
Unwittingly at Time’s command
Continuously struggling against its iron will
Perpetually caught: until we run out – of time
Author notes
Contest The Best of AP by ageofdarkpoets
A contest entry
- JUST WRITE ME A POEM by Swan song.
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Comments
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Well written
A well written poem but the multi syllable vocabulary
did you no favours.Otherwise quite a good write
George aodp -
I have mixed feelings about this piece. It feels like the first three verses are just a repetition reworded and then your diction: you use a few large words. I think they detract from the simplicity of the rest of your piece. I think it's an interesting topic and I love how you approached it. It's an overall good piece. Thanks for sharing.
Yink
AODP -
I enjoyed this very much and htink it is one heck of a poem.! Good luck and I will be back to read this again
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Yeah, I hate the mach force kind of time! I love the word usage and the visuals to match. Best of luck in the contest
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