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Like a Rock




Like a rock across water
his words skipped,
touching only the ears needed

and as his end neared
he touched more and more, before
disappearing.




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  • donnz
    September 8, 2008

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    excellent

    Brings to mind every person, great and small / that I never met & wished I had. ( jesus / buddha / and that girl with polio that lived down the block in '53.)


  • Samplette gold member
    September 4, 2008

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    A very poignant scene you have brought to life. Profound and powerful read. Lots of meaning.
    Sam


  • Dragen2201
    September 4, 2008

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    Good

    good write nice flow and rythm in the first stanza but it seemed a little forced in the last line. other than that it was a great poem and i look forward to seeing more