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Your Haunting Melody

Missing image

Fingers that once tickled keys to your life's piano

    now sit idle, unmotivated to move on ~

        only your refrain plays in my soul... 


Your haunting melody lingers,

    coursing through my soul like a ghost ~

        subtle nuances ring in moments of silence,

            stirring memories of when you --                 

                          
May my heartbeat be your song's rhythm,

    forever keeping time with your spirit's lyric.

 

Author notes

Option D, photobucket

Note: Stanza 2's sharp ending ( "when you --" )is intentional...fill in the blank, the memory of the departure (death, more likely) does not want to escape into words...

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  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    September 6, 2008

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    You've brought this picture to life.. a memory of someone that was loved, forever remembered.. this is a beautiful poem, one that is absolutely incredible.. the last five lines said so much to me, the last 2 really hit hard. Excellent job on this prompt.. Absolutely beautiful poem..

    good luck in the contest

    kat


  • MysticalRayne
    September 5, 2008

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    Beautifully done ~ this is my favorite part:
    "May my heartbeat be your song's rhythm,
    forever keeping time with your spirit's lyric."
    best of luck in the contest


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    September 4, 2008

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    Excellent

    Ah, 'tis a fine write, my friend. I enjoyed your imagery, in relation to the pic. Thanks for sharing this one with us.


  • KayJay
    September 4, 2008

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    Absolutely beautiful... you have captured the delicate feel of the prompt with wonderful words and images... Bet I know who you were thinking about Well done, Tim... This is a wonderful gift.
    Ken


    • Xianaria gold member
      September 4, 2008
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      thanks ken~
      no, not lisa...this story is in remembrance of someone who passed, keeping their memory alive. not based on anyone in particular, just what i felt from the prompt.


      • KayJay
        September 4, 2008
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        Even better... a wonderful rememberance.

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