I weep deep, prayerfully,
with warmth from humble fire,
to hear angelic symphony,
joyful Jesus calling me.
Laid in Gethsemane
from this body I’ll be free;
in grace I die
for love of Jesus Christ,
for my son, I die.
Apostles’ sanctity,
crying mournfully
foretell tomorrow’s destiny
lonely death’s sweet mystery.
Laid in Gethsemane
from this body I’ll be free;
in grace I die
for love of Jesus Christ,
for my son, I die.
I hear your litany,
and take your hand, my son,
secure in your divinity,
you, the risen Holy One.
Laid in Gethsemane
from this body I’ll be free;
in grace I die
for love of Jesus Christ,
for my son, I die.
Please know my legacy,
to all humanity,
I give succour eternally.
Life lit by a mother’s love.
Laid in Gethsemane
from this body I’ll be free;
in grace I die
for love of Jesus Christ,
for my son, I die.
Author notes
Option 3
According to some stories, Mary died in her house, which John built for her. It was the only stone house in the area, with a spring running by and a fire in the centre. Old and tired, she laid her head on pillows in her sleeping alcove, and, surrounded by praying women, with the Apostles praying for her, she passed away and was buried in a tomb in either Jerusalem or Ephesus. But did she really die?
A contest entry
- #116 Winklings on Wednesdays: Write a poem about women in death by Lyndon.
1500 points, ended September 15, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 20 OPTIONS CONTEST!!! (My way) by ourgirlFriday.
600 points, ended October 11, 2008, 13 entries
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Good point
Theologians have debated this for years; the Greeks refer to it as the 'Dormition of Mary' because she was assumed body and soul into heaven by God (contrast - she did not ascend as her Son did, God)...along the lines of the theme "love is only sleeping." Good write!
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Mariology is dealt with well, here.
The Dormition of St Mary is a fascinating subject for a poem and, you, poet have done it justice.
Your notes are interesting but the poem can well stand on its own. Who better to write about than she who is blessed above all other women, in Christian Theology?
A musician could put this poem to music very well with its vowels and rhyme and also refrain.
Thank you for a most interesting read.
Lyndon.
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Thank you judges
for the silver. I am honoured. This was a demanding task for the poets and I appreciate the thought and effort you both put in.
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I have never thought about the death of Mary. you made for me my first ever read on the subject. I am finding that strange, as most of my prayer is directed to her. It was beautiful, a picture to stay in my mind, as I feel this must be something like how it was. enhanced by the rhythm and easy flow. My thanks
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The format you have chosen adds another dimention to the power of the poetry. I find that the topic of joy and love in death is quite remarkable for my belief is that death is not an end but merely a completion of a part of our existence. Well done.
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Gethsemane is the name of my favorite song! This is a really interesting poem - I like the way you have written so well in this form this is a lovely poem about Mary - I think you chose a very powerful woman to write about and you did it very well I wish you the best in the contest!
Keep writing
Polly
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Life trains us to grasp it tightly, yet faith tells us that God's love is here and there, without end. You capture that graceful ending in your verses. There is sadness for those who mourn, and also comfort.
This is an interesting form - the repeated lines lend themselves to song.
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well done .. liked "from this body I'll be free" and "lonely death's sweet mystery" . . best of luck in the contest
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