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Shades Of Grey

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Calling the darkness
bleak sorrows unfold,
left alone, dreamless
out in the cold.

I heard whispers
deep into the night,
reminding me love
is not black and white.

Opiate skies carried
memories so cherished,
exhaled too quickly
all visions perished.

Hopes now frozen
inside glass minds,
long lingering echoes
fall lost through time.

Emptiness comes
stays at my side,
Shrouding tears
so willingly cried.

Despair devours
my heart does bleed,
falling in love

was an evil deed.

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Prompt 2
Credit: http://arthame.deviantart.com/art/Whispers-in-the-Dark-84759811

Meh...been a long time since I wrote anything like this...was fun

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  • VoltaicHypnosis gold member
    September 16, 2008

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    Sooo amazing... you carve your words into sentimental parchemnts, painting vivid image and emotion... bravissimo, hun...


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    September 12, 2008

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    well for something that you haven't written in such a long time, this outstanding, completely stunning this poem this write is.. the imagery is fantastic. I love this poem so very much.. Yep I do ..
    Outstanding job with the prompt and with your poem ..

    good luck in the contest

    kat


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    Wowzers!! What a stunning poem!! No.. love is not black and white... and just some times it is evil in the despair it can cause!

    Brilliant hun!!



  • Reptile Lady gold member
    September 8, 2008

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    Oh I like
    This is dark and sends a powerful message too
    Last stanza says it all!
    Best wishes hun and good luck in the contest
    Julie


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    September 6, 2008

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    i bow down to the grace of your pen, this is one of you best so far, i know you got more in you, keep it flowing and good luck int he contest


  • notorious
    September 5, 2008

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    mind's,==>minds
    It's not a possessive form.

    I LOVE your background!!!
    I hate rhyme...still...
    but I think it comes really naturally to you.

    Good luck Reina
    Hehe

    Jessica


  • nature mithya
    September 4, 2008

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    The good deeds to forget?

    'Despair devours
    my heart does bleed,
    falling in love
    was an evil deed.'
    Any picture can be taken in the dark or in the light of courage.
    Wonder why the dark side always takes the upper hand.
    The words and thoughts sing for the dark in beauty that hurts love.
    Excellent write should try this dark side write sometimes.


    • LadyDementia gold member
      September 4, 2008
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      thanks for the comment! You really should try darker poems...they can be fun to write


  • jackysunshine
    September 4, 2008
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    Excellent

    Full of emotion. Loved the way it was written. Keep up the good work.


  • PastelMoons gold member
    September 4, 2008

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    Another hard hitting write!
    I love 'opiate skies..' 'dreamless
    out in the cold'
    I'll stop there before
    I write your poem
    back to you
    Awesome write!!!
    ~Pastel


  • aboomer silver member
    September 4, 2008

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    Great wording full of images and emotion! I especially like,

    'Hopes now frozen
    inside glass mind's,
    long lingering echoes
    fall lost through time.'

    Well done! best wishes in your contest.


  • maralisa silver member
    September 4, 2008

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    wow a wonderful poem full of deep emotion from stanza one through to stanza six I love the background it wonderful good luck in the contest


  • Angelflower
    September 4, 2008

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    Bravo!! you did a wonderful job! not that anyone didn't expect you to do badly..lol.. if that's even possible. I love the emotion in this write.. it's intense. Bravo!! best of luck in the contest hun..

    Angel

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