Soulless eyes watch you walk away
Voices slip out a wounded throat
Reaching; inside bleeding
Useless words pour forth
Im sorry
-Im-
Not sure you
(even care )
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie Contest!! by Sweet Impatience.
1080 points, ended September 7, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
please tell me what you really think
Comments
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Awww this was really sad and powerful.
Congrats on the HM! I love you
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this is sad beautifuly written but small and seas so much
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very emotional, and sad...love ya! Auntie Trisha
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Wow.. this was really good hun! such sorrow and yet insecurity as well! you really brought a lot of emotion to this picture!! *hugs* well done! best of luck in the contest hun..
Angel
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a brilliantly deep and powerful poem from line one through to line nine good luck in the contest
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WOW!! this is quite powerful. ouch it hurts too. the pain that I felt while reading this was very strong. I really love your take on the prompt.
this just reaches inside of a person and really pulls hard at the heart strings.
good luck in the contest
kat
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wow emmy this is amazing it's one of your best poems I think great use of DP at the end too this poem really hit home good luck in thwe contest xx
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