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Already Gone

She stands
Her mind empty
A blank slate
No feelings of love
No feelings of hate
Her love has run dry
Her body stands still
Her black blood runs cold
It was four months ago today
In this very spot
I watched you wak away
Two short years
That felt like mere hours
Filed with memories
We were sure would always last
Now I look back
Once you've had the best
Its to hard to settle
At the edge of the feild she stands
Her last words to him crumpled in her hands
The darkness is taking over
The shadows over head
Her mind prepared
Her body numbing
As her finger starts to tense
She uses her last breath to say I love you baby
Forever and for more

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