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Lonely Face

 

I'm so lonely

outside of my shell

speaking in mesurements

and not feeling quite well.

 

Sitting here shameful

tears welling my eyes

while you whisper in my ears

and spread your dirty lies.

 

Bitterness shatters the forsaken mirror

as others blame themselves again

constant screaming in the background

all of them begging to win.

 

Not a single trace of dignity

is left upon this childish face

you say you love me

when indeed I'm your utter disgrace.

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  • crimsondew
    October 19, 2008
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    A sad write indeed reaping with feelings apt for it...
    Wonderful read!


  • WolfHeart
    October 18, 2008
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    Deeply emotional. You juxtapose love with shame, making for an interesting mixture. Very well done.
    Not a single trace of dignity

    is left upon this childish face

    you say you love me

    when indeed I'm your utter disgrace.

    These lines especially spoke to me, so you are able to reach out to the reader and draw them in.


  • Candy6
    September 30, 2008

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    The picture and the background are beautiful. Great write. I wrote today poem titled "Lonely Girl," and it has the picture, too but poets has to click on it.


  • whiterabbit.
    September 7, 2008

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    I really like this. It's so well written. I love it when rhyming poems flow well and don't sound forced. The emotions come out of this very vividly and I feel like I can relate to the emotions here. The imagery you create is wonderful as well. Great write.
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  • deathgirljoel123
    September 5, 2008
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    deathgirljoel123

    loved lonely face reminded me of times when I was with a guy named Joel. Hope to chat with you!

  • deathgirljoel123
    September 5, 2008

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    deathgirljoel123

    It I'd a good poem and it made me think of a certain poem and this has been the best poem I have read all night

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