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Forgotten Appalachian

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The road twists and turns
passing overgrown yards,
broken down cars and red clay faces
of the ones left to grow old.
Aging in loneliness
which clings to my skin,
like dry dust stirred
from rolling tires of time.

And the gardens grow
neat and tall.
Tended generation after generation
by gentle hands of oppression.
The hound's howl haunts my soul,
crawling under my skin
like an unwanted visitor from the past,
weighing heavy upon my memories.
Slowing my breathing under it's dark sound.

One more bend reveals the once white picket fence
weathered by the years of neglect.
My throat dries in the thick air
of the forgotten drive
leading way to the once grandeur home,
where cotton fields no longer shine
and no-one runs to greet you,
as the porch sits empty of the once welcoming chairs
no longer followed by the sound of running feet and children's laughter.


And I wonder when it all faded
                   ~unnoticed,
until there was no home to return to,
just ghost of the past
and forgotten moments of love.

 

 

 

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  • Pure Thought silver member
    November 3

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    Funny I should turn to this one of yours. I live at the foot of the Blueridge mountains and look across the vally toward the Appalachian. On Sunday afternoons my wife and I will ride through them and marvel at all the forgotten houses and wonder of their history.

    This is very well written.

    Buddy


  • tombruize
    September 30
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    Very nice...

    Amazing imagery - - emotion pours here

  • heylookaneuphemism
    September 11

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    Beautiful writing, your imagery is lush and finely written. I like your detailed approach in building this journey. I enjoyed reading your talent.


  • daviscth silver member
    August 24

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    I think this is a wonderful poem and I'm pleased to see that you won a cup with it. This picture and your poem reminds me so much of how I was feeling about my childhood house until we decided to remodel it. Thanks for sharing with me. This is a great poem.

  • Hoodwinked!

    This poem is filled with stirring images - feelings of loneliness, shades of melancholy and neglect invade the soul of the reader. Well written!

  • Such vivid and visual imagery. I could feel the emotion and intensity here. So descriptive and heartbreakingly attention grabbing. Thanks for sharing this... x

  • Visual Imagery

    Tended generation after generation
    by gentle hands of oppression.

    The road twist
    I think you need an "s" in both of these?
    just ghost of the past

    Dear Poet,

    Thank you for entering my contest: PREWRITES
    FOR BRONZE & SILVER TROPHY WINNERS, ONLY with your submission FORGOTTEN APPALACHIAN.

    Wishing you the best

    till then,

    stay

    liquid


  • condor gold member
    January 2

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    very lovely write and a sad memory to look back on. Well, I wouldn't say the memory is sad, because you had some many wonderful years in that lovely home, which by the way...I love that picture. It's the kind of place I wouldn't mind having. I draw old country houses like that and wouldn't mind being able to do so if you wouldn't mind. Anyway, It is sad to look at something that gave you so many years of joy and see it sitting neglected and rundown, but I would believe the spirit of the house is still there, because it brought you home, didn't it? Thank you for entering.


  • Swan song gold member
    November 15, 2008
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    O i love this one i will need to read it again i can so relate


  • Forgotten Anomaly
    November 3, 2008

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    Wonderful, very descriptive indeed. I love the picture. I'd leave a more detailed comment but I don't have time sorry, but I do really love this peice. Thank you for entering my contest.


    • mysticstorm gold member
      November 3, 2008
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      Thank you the picture is mine...the old family hose of so friends of mine...
      Best,
      mystic


  • My Milieu
    October 15, 2008
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    I really enjoyed this a lot. I'm no good at imagery so I love to read it in the poetry of others.

  • piccola silver member
    October 15, 2008
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    lots of imagery here...goes well with the photo and is a photo in itself. thank you for entering


  • Angelo di Luce gold member
    September 14, 2008
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    A wonderful jorney to the good old days
    Most of us miss and remember
    Well done


  • Manoj Sanyal
    September 14, 2008

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    written well w.r.t the photograph....
    Best wishes and good luck,


  • Grey Mouser
    September 5, 2008

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    Moving and sad, a beautifully written emotional surge in the glories of the past that never made their way into the present.
    Love,
    xoxoxoxoxo
    Sun and stars shine no brighter than you!


  • Lexie -
    September 4, 2008
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    wow

    i love this so much mom!!!
    i want this house!! very me!!!


  • maralisa silver member
    September 4, 2008

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    wow a beautiful poem full of amazing imagery and subtle deep emotions from stanza one through to stanza three

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