I saw the lightning strike
The tree next door
It flashed and died
Seconds to go
I let the lightning
Illuminate my face
Stark white against the backdrop
The wind picks up
And the branches sway
A spark flies over the street
A contest entry
- Pre-Write Appreciation Day 2008 by Kimojuno.
1447 points, ended October 8, 2008, 40 entries
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This poem features quite a bit of imagery, a great flow, and some rhyme. It is a really nice bit of poem.
It works the way that it is,
Jeff. -
I let the lightning
Illuminate my face
Stark white against the backdrop
very nice imagery!
I really enjoyed this piece as a whole.
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you put to use alot of very nice imagry bro, i also like how this one is some what simplistic, i've grown bored of complexity
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this poem is really cool, i've never been that close to lighting i kinda would like too, but the thought scares me, this is a great poem with details too
keep up the writing,
~Amy -
i like this. alot. it's very descriptive in its few lines. I love these lines- they just strike a chord, make it identifiable i suppose.
I let the lightning
Illuminate my face
Stark white against the backdrop
very well done! -
Nice....
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