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I Really Miss You

Every night was the best
With you and me together
There was never a dull moment
The laughter would never stop
The fun would never end

But now we're so far apart
Going our seperate ways
Living seperate lives
We're so far apart
Not able to see each other

Chorus
I really miss you
That laugh that you do
When I'm a total dork
I really miss you
The random moments
That made life seem right
I really miss you
I don't know how
To live without you

I still remember the feelings
I have when I'm with you
The happiness the completeness
And I wish I could have this again

You're all that's on my mind
And all the things we would do
I wish we could be doing it again
Instead of being so far from each other

Repeat Chorus

Author notes

This song is about my friend, Sierra and I. This summer we were compleletly insperable. We hung out well into the wee hours of the morning. Now, I am an hour and forty-five minutes away from her in college and its really saddening and I Really Miss Her!!!

And I chose this background to show the crossroads that we have started walking.

Sorry i didn't add this it is option 3.

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  • Walls-within
    September 5, 2008

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    I assume I know what option you used, but it would be nice for you to put the option number in the AN.

    About the song, I think it came together really well. I think that it had a lot of emotion, and I think that you were able to capture it well.

    --I think that adding the "Chorus" part, I mean to say the word, not the actual thing, sort of turned the song around though. I think the song would have done better with you fully writing the chorus a second time, and not have us, as the reader, double back to see how it works together. This is just my oppinion, and I do hope that it doesn't dicourage you.

    All in all, a very well written song. Good luck in my contest!

    *Walls-within*


  • ButiiLoveHiim
    September 3, 2008
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    omfg...ilyk...LOVE ITTT! (: its fantastic

    =D Big Thumbs Up


  • vampireblood
    September 3, 2008

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    Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!
    I think I'm gonna cry now. Like seriously.
    I wanna like give you a big hug like right now. You should come home so I can =]
    <3
    Sierra