Hasn't anyone told you?
I stopped breathing
When you left
My
World.
Didn't anyone tell you?
My last breath was
I love you
I hope you're happy
I died
In your arms
In your tears
Mixed
With my own
I know it's so hard
To say
Goodbye
But you
Must
Because
I died
Tonight
What do you guys think?
Comments
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wow. i love it! my favorite line is "My last breath was
I love you" good write. good emotion displayed in this poem. keep up the good work
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Wow
This is a great write. I love how your emotions flow off the page. Great Job!
Heather
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great great great i love it
maserpeice :]
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i think you have a lot of potential and the ending you gave did not live up to it i was thinking maybe somthing going on about how is your world maybe something along the lines of
"did anyone tell you,
my last breath was i love you"
you were my night in shinning armor
too lazy to get off his stead
idk (i like that secound line actully i may use that your welcome to if you want too)
keep working on this right
its has amazing potential
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