sometimes i feel like
we're stuck on a ferris wheel
sitting next to each other
seeing the same things
again and again
we have the same conversation
on the very same corner
every day of the year
through sunshine and through snow
you never look any different
those big brown eyes,
your messy hair.
and there's always a big smile
waiting on your face for me
when you see me walking toward you
as you lazily lean
against the streetlight pole.
we might as well replace ourselves
with portraits and audio tapes
so that maybe i could move on
to something more stimulating
but god knows i'll miss you
and our little corner talks
and oh,
god knows i'll miss that smile.
Author notes
Porcelain Princess
option two
` we might as well replace ourselves
with portraits and audio tapes.
credit to checkmate for that quote. =]
A contest entry
- Proudly Presenting: ROUND 2 (: by Walk-Free.
1500 points, ended October 7, 2008, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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congruatulations on winning a silver!
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wow. wow. wow.
one of the best pieces so far
not just because you used one of my favourite quotes ever..but because you wrote this piece with such talent, great work 
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aaww
I love the essence of this poem and how sadness is portrayed. A very interesting perspective and I love how you added the prompt which is one of my favourites.
The imagery was good too. I am glad the background was not too bright.
goood luck!!!!
transit~ 
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AWW!
this is a great quote, and i love how you've interpreted it! this is such an innocent and sweet write! you sent stunning images running in mind! your emotions were weaved pretty well... and your last stanza was so cute! keep penning, and thank u so much for this awesome write!
~beauty of silence
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Fantastic interpretation of the prompt. I love the imagery and the repetition. You took that prompt and you made it your own. You made it personal, the feelings you express so genuine, and at the same time universal enough for you reader to see from your point of view. Fantastic. Amazing.
Macte!(Well done!),
Jacob
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please credit checkmate for the quote (:
i love this
i love how you used an image of a ferris wheel ride to convey how repetitive our lives are.
i loved how you described that guy that you want to forget.
i love what you did to the quote.
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