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Demon Within

The demon who hides in the bottle
Lurks in it's dark brown liquid
Only emerges to mess with us

Blurs our vision
We lose self control
Can't think right anymore

The demon now smiles at us
As he now lurks within us
crawling in your veins
As you drink the devil's drink

All thought lost
Wake up with no memory
Your head now rings with an unpleasant sound

You now regret your choice to take the bottle

 

Life gets hard and you see the demon calling to you

So hard to resist, as it's fingers grasp at you

You embrace it's warm hand

 

You are now back to the bottle

Everything goes blurry

For you sin now, and have no memory of it

Now wanted for murder

With no recollection, just a ringing head

 

You once again turn to the bottle

As you reach for it, now blocked by the steal bars

You sit and weep for the demon within is gone

Never to comfort you again

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In all this chaos we found saftey

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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 27, 2008

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    Outstanding write! Thank you for entering the contest, good luck

    ♥
    whisper


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    September 26, 2008

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    This was a terrific poem
    and it kind of gets you thinking

    Thanks for sharing it with us


  • Mrs. C.
    September 15, 2008
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    i ill not dq you but please put your ap name in the AN


  • Mrs. C.
    September 13, 2008
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    thank you for entering
    i love this so. such a grate use of metafor.


  • tortured-heart
    September 12, 2008

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    wow this is amazing...its so true that when we drink a demon comes out of us that we seem to have no control over...but in the end we have to face up to the actions of our demon
    peace, love, & cheese


  • Mistress Masquerade
    September 3, 2008

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    This is amazing, and makes me think of frends, family and even myself.. Kinda.. Hit a soft spot for me. Best of luck to you.

    Peace, Love and Rock'n;Roll!
    Miss Masquerade


  • Karlie67
    September 3, 2008

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    Oooh this is good, speaking of the devil in such terms is wonderful, I must say I like this part the most:
    The demon now smiles at us
    As he now lurks within us
    crawling in your veins
    As you drink the devil's drink

    Well done and thanks for entering the contest good luck!
    Karlie
    xx


  • Toxic Angel
    September 3, 2008
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    whoa, this was really good, it reminds me of a person i know.

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