Oh sweet angel of mine,
With kisses ever so divine;
Please keep giving me love,
The same as two little turtle doves.
Why is it your heart of gold,
To others feels like a heart of cold?
You always wear a target on your chest,
Where my head should be at rest.
There will always be those who wants you,
Only because of the things you can do;
Never for a reason why,
Only to bring you down from the sky.
Your beauty is both your curse and your gift,
Forcing eyes to go adrift;
For they only want to see your beauty alone,
Letting your heart turn to stone.
Oh sweet angel of mine,
Together we will age like fine wine;
There will be those who careless,
Of filling our lives with stress.
But they will never get in our way,
Because I am here to forever stay;
Hundreds have you in their heads,
To only dream of you in bed.
Even though I am the devil,
There is no one on my level;
So they can keep on trying,
Because at the end they'll just be crying;
Of never ever having an angel,
Who can undo every single tangle;
That life has to throw at us,
So we never have to fuss.
Oh sweet angel of mine,
With kisses ever so divine;
Let us go and fly,
To a place where our love shall never die.
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this is a great poem...i like the flow, however a few of the lines leave something to be desired. but the structure isn't always the main focus in poetry...the emotion is true and you expressed your feelings brilliantly.
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It speaks of a love beyond her surface, which is the only kind that has a chance of lasting. If she has a brain in her head, she will walk into those arms that would hold her whole self. The message is beautiful, the rhythm smooth, though rhyme is a little forced in places. As a whole, this piece has great promise, the one to whom it is written would feel cherished indeed by it.
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goregous ?
Sounds like an insult to me.
Gorgeous is not a typo
Never won a spelling bee
As I sure did try although
Always one better you see.
Above is an example of meter
Same number of syllables in each line
It will tend to make poetry sweeter
For your special love who is most sublime.
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This has a lyrical quality about that I like. You're rhyming is okay. You may wish to shortening some of your lines. like, Just to see how far they can bring you down from the sky. This we'll create a better flow. Thanks for sharing and keep writing.
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