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Split Seam

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Stumbling,
I found the bump in tomorrow -
a split seam in the universe
as I walked five hundred miles of aimless
passing the same trees and houses
the closed doors of the churches
addict-filled shooting galleries
running past mirrors
avoiding reflections
shunning myself
moving faster, breathing harder
sweating your salt from my body
holding the wolf of your name inside me

Then,
I heard a rumour
that I may still love you
     and I am ripped
           flawlessly open…













 


Split Seam
©crisstiena

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  • zt
    October 2, 2008

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    I just love the line "sweating your salt from my body"! I wonder where the accent is on that one? Hmmm... Wolf, eh? ~ponders again~ Congrats on the trophy. Your descriptions are certainly worthy!


  • autarky
    September 30, 2008

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    i really, really like the intensity of emotion in this write, especially with that punch-in-the-gut ending.

    thanks for entering.


  • Rowan gold member
    September 4, 2008

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    "holding the wolf of your name inside me

    Then,
    I heard a rumour"
    I loved those lines. Never believe a heart's rumor, hon, it's just a murmur.
    I liked this one.


  • apples fell
    September 3, 2008

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    Prophetic and absolute.
    I thought it was truth, weaved into the fabric of things spoken of in passing and taken into consideration...Like wings and like the passing time, held always, held onto and then when it is most needed, let go of...Perhaps being ripped open and the love we share can really show us who we are and that search is never over, not completely...Like the search for dreams or the unending tree of knowledge we wait under.

    ;


  • Night Hope gold member
    September 3, 2008

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    "shunning myself"

    Ahhh, this is something I've become quite proficient at, it seems.

    Piercing, my Sister.

     

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