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Quivers

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Feathers felt in the deepest hollows of the heart,

little invisible quills that write their messages in the mind,

feeling lightheaded as if on a buoy riding the sea,

swaying, while being held by unseen hands,

between subtle caresses of elation and euphoria.

 

Then there are the smothering seconds

of instinct's crippling hesitations,

some resonance rises from a room or landscape

that touches in a gaze as if it were lightning,

insides begin to suffocate from a sense of dread,

breathing becomes shallow, heart pounds

intuition screams that a menace left a fingerprint

as a transparent aura, which shakes so intensely within,

unsure if it is ghost or angel,

just aware it isn't mortal.

 

Surreal visions race through the head,

strange mental concoctions of disquieting portrait,

they wrap around one's mood

with mixtures of fear and curiosity.

 

It is when the wind blows with a chill

during the middle of the summer,

while standing inside the house with the windows closed

and no fan running.

 

They are all the brushes of ethereal lips

kissing the soul's membrane

leaving a quiver that lingers in disheveling traces

one can't explain.

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  • aboomer silver member
    September 17, 2008

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    wow - I love this! Great wording - so many lines I really like - and my favorite verse keeps changing...lol....just know I loved it all, and I really like how you ended this,

    'They are all the brushes of ethereal lips
    kissing the soul's membrane
    leaving a quiver that lingers in disheveling traces
    one can't explain.'

    Thank you for such a great entry.
    best wishes in the contest.



  • islekine gold member
    September 17, 2008

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    Zowie...I must say...I read this three

    times....like a good movie, a certain stanza would stand out each time.....extremely well thought out...
    and the words......well, I tried to find a favorite line....there were too many to choose...best wishes in the contest!
    "between subtle caresses of elation and euphoria."

    "It is when the wind blows with a chill
    during the middle of the summer,
    while standing inside the house with the windows closed
    and no fan running."

    And a whole lot in between!!!
    Thanks for entering!
    Write on!





  • maralisa silver member
    September 4, 2008

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    a brilliant take on the promt with some brillaint imagery and strong emotion from stanza one through to five good luck in the contest


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 3, 2008

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    This poem has an aura of its own...spellbinding, addictive, enchanting. Most enjoyable, I could have read on for eons...Bravo