She slipped like a breeze
below a threshold,
just a shiver upon chandeliers
hung in forbidding halls,
hoping the prisms
wouldn’t refract her paleness,
or blind her with company.
She could exist on a sigh
wrapped in self pity
and never miss the colours
of her dreams,
so long as ice remained opaque.
Author notes
"Her rainbow is
an assembly of blues."
- Heather Harvey
WARNING. This contest is completely unexpected. By entering, you are agreeing to the following terms of us:
- We have the right to make you write in any form/style/type of poetry there is on this planet. We will literally murder ourselves sometimes by trying to find even at least one bizarre form. But, then again, you may have easy things too. Or maybe not. You never know.
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In a list
A contest entry
- Quote Inspired. by Naridill.
650 points, ended September 15, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - UNPLANNED: as unexpected as you [preliminary round] by Never Fall in Love.
400 points, ended December 22, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Looking for Crickets 4 by Celticmoon.
1750 points, ended January 23, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - emotion illness rounds - AUDITIONS by stasis.
700 points, ended February 7, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Ultimate Cricket- Preliminaries by B Chandler.
400 points, ended May 13, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critique Requested
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Well versed
Such a pleasure to read your work again! I have so missed your hauntingly powerful poetry. Each line flows perfectly to the next. A well written piece my friend!
Shannon
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wow.. thhis is amazing.. very nice use of imagery and a great use of vocabulary.. adds a very mature and nice touch to the poem.
thanks for entering my contest!
and best of luck!!
your judge,
-Lemon Bee-
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yes.
I really enjoyed the length, given that I've been reading long poems for a while. also, the imagery and impact was amazing.
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yes.
I adore this. I think that it was just long enough to punch me in the stomach, but short enough to hold my attention. And it did. Fantastic.
Please wait for the other judge to comment with her opinion.
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wonderfully written love the part....She slipped like a breeze
below a threshold,
just a shiver upon chandeliers
hung in forbidding halls,
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Superb Plus
A very fine write, just as it is. You've expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
hauntingly great work you have penned. i can see why you won a gold cup. i enjoyed reading the poem and the imagery is quite good, too. thanks for sharing.
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interesting imagery you have here
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woah.
I absolutely love how ypu took such a simple quote and expanded on it so well.
Great write.
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thank you for entering x
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cricket
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*cricket*
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Yes
Brilliant! That is all I have to say.
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Wow a brilliant penning here Simply stunning from the beginning to the end
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More than worthy of gold
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Neat.
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I totally agree with Lynda..this is amazing..you have woven pure genius from this prompt..the way only you can do..(don't let your head swell tooo much..hehe)..thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest..blessings..namaste..
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This Piece is great I loved it thanks
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omg!!!!!!!!
There is no way I can choose favorite lines. I adore every breath of this...
I say it often, but you are so amazing, Bro
sigh
Lynda
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