cautious mist surrounds
a stream appears foreboding
hesitant canoe
stroke the waters soon
balance life with one who lives
to paddle onwards
seek the new unknown
claim tomorrow with courage
firmly grasp the wood
Author notes
prompt: senyru string (3 stanzas)
non-traditional
A contest entry
- Senryu string contest ... quickie... 20 POETS by Manoj Sanyal.
370 points, ended September 10, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Nice
Okay I enjoyed this poem, it was thought provoking. As far as haikus go it was good. I will say this though it could have been better, don't ask me how because I couldn't say, but it just didn't stand out to me enough to get a trophy. (read my top three they are excellent.) Oh and I don't think you meant it but love the inuendo at the end lol -
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thanks
thanks for the comments . . already has a trophy so I'll withdraw
it as it is non-traditional . . no innuendo at the end intended !!
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I'll bet the old japanese masters would just go nuts if they could have got out to the back woods for a month with a canoe!
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Wonderful
Very creative and so well done. Congratulations on the silver.
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well penned....
hesitant canoe and
firmly grasp the wood... nice.
Thanks for your participation.
Good luck,
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