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me





putting me in the
dark
but the shark
trys to get me 

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that is how i feel

tell me what i done right and wrong and ill go back and try to change it

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  • zhaniswolf
    October 24, 2008

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    geez. the shark is always trying to get us, but we have to punch that thing in the nose until it finally gets the message. Sis, life is an ongoing battle. That's how it is. We just have to remain strong.

  • dx d by me
    September 3, 2008
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    I think it is less about right and wrong, and more about feeling the poetry represents what you want to say. I'm wondering who or what the shark represents and how you get "put" in the dark. I do like the brevity of this piece and the "heavy" tone you have managed in so few words. Nicely written. Keep writing! Geo