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It had been seven years
since she last felt this way,

since someone listened to the
lashes beneath her frames,
since someone felt the
vibrant words trickle from her lips.

Since someone requested
her company.

She’d been travelling
with closed minds
along the harsh roads
leading to printed paper.

She’d almost forgotten
what sincerity meant,
and she’d almost forgotten
her eyes still sparkled.

Author notes

Image taken from art.co.uk.

I find this uplifting. Hope you do too, if not, sorry.

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  • Samplette gold member
    September 15, 2008

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    I like this. It leaves a good feeling after reading. Very nice. Thank you for entering the contest.
    Sam


  • Rose Angel gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    You have an intriguing way of writing..great imagery, and verbage...You attract attention of the reader! Great talent, keep it up!

  • Broken-Bones
    September 13, 2008

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    I liked the opening stanza, that really draws the reader in to the piece. I loved the image this created and the way you took the prompt and crafted a tale around it. I found th piece easy to read and thought the structure worked really well. My favourite part is without a doubt the final stanza, I loved the thought of this girl and everything she has forgotten as I could relate it to myself and to a few people I know. Great work x


  • Ditt0
    September 5, 2008

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    Oh my sack. Really I digged this piece sooo much! The pic is insane.

    "lashes beneath her frames,"
    definetly my favourite line...

    For some reason your final stanza is so absolutely amazing... I gonna check more of your stuff...


  • stylization
    September 5, 2008

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    I can't believe I'm the first comment on this.It's beautiful, written from a standpoint that's both far-out and close to home. The stanza-breaks work well here; I love it. Best of luck in the contest!

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