I want to share
every Season with you;
watch leaves turn
in rivers of your reflection
taste Winter, melting
within our kiss;
re-live the birth of love
in breaths of May
watching petals bloom Spring
through the glimmer
of your gentle gaze.
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You have shown me Summers;
the sparkle of your smile
igniting my senses
quenching my thirst
with your tender touch,
in quiet evenings, our love
shimmering like diamonds
to outshine the stars.
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Soon, my Love,
We will be more than just a dream
from which we must awaken
when destiny walks with us
petals falling in flutter
just a heartbeat away
and I shall share
every Season with you.
♥♥
~
Author notes
My version is a little different 
Just how my mind works, so you can DQ me
but I just had to enter this wonderful contest...
image credit:
http://img231.imageshack.us/img231/7859/autumn76lg7.jpg
A contest entry
- "Roots" by kaibab.
1700 points, ended September 14, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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beauty and flow...the essence of roots, and those to whom we cling. loved it, Lynda.
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Breath the air of northern imagination,
your and he, entangled as the flakes of with,
tingling slope to fly my season,
beyond the crital curse of winter.
I love this touch of angle blushing...
thanks for you entry
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No DQ here!
Your version is
a Vibrato of visuals
that went to the roots of Love
Passionate & Pleasing, Poet!
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Beautiful write filled to overflowing with tender thoughts that caress the mind... who cares if he DQ's you, its still golden in my book..
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Beauty
there we go again my loving beautiful Aunt Lynda showin off the sparkling talent of your poetic works and its funny because I copied n pasted your entire poem and sent it to my friend on yahoo and Lmao he was like who wrote this so I told him & he says I need to e like you and I smiled but cracked up. any ways sorry for that lil rant there. I love your beautiful poem here and I really admire how you structured it down so the point of easy fluididity through out the poem and just love the over all quality to the poem too. any ways a well written nicely penned poem and keep up the very good work. Me
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lol
your sweet and funny comments always make me smile and laugh my nephew
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This is pure magic! What a wonderful read this one is! Sounds like something I would say, and share with one that you know too
And I have to say I am awaiting that day, when I can share every season with him. Great job!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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sublime dream-like imagery that swoops one up and leaves them sitting with a sigh in swoonville.
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Excellent!
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My
such a lovely way of saying .. Forever. And the poet just sighs. oh love just let it be.
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I can hear the call to become rooted in the cycle of life, to join in celebrating each of the changes as a sacred gift. Beautifully done.
Love, Tom B.
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Just beautiful sis.
Its good to have you as the light in my darkness
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awwwwwwwww ty Bro for being so supportive and for being you....
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This is such a very soft and beautifully spoken piece of the heart's desire. The sincerity seals the path of enlightenment, ever waiting to be discovered in the sweet embrace that awaits.
"watch leaves turn
in rivers of your reflection
taste Winter, melting
within our kiss"
.. that is just such amazing descriptive for the emotion within ..
"the sparkle of your smile
igniting my senses"
.. this is just sigh-ful ..
"our love
shimmering like diamonds
to outshine the stars"
.. a forever kind of devotion, so poignant in its presence ..
"Soon, my Love,
We will be more than just a dream"
.. an excellent ending to this ..
An excellent piece of smooth flowing love and adoration of seasons to come.
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awwwwwww ty sweet Sis for the lovely comment! I have been suffering from writer's block and I walked outside and it was so cool this morning like a change of Season
things started to flow...
Lynda
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