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Human murals on the wall.

Human murals wedged on the wall,
The castle is being built!

Put your hands down!
Thumbs up,
Don’t curve your fingers.
Cause the pain just gets worse.
If you kick yourself out of here,
There is still the boundary railing!
He tousled his mane,
Sighed,
And there was a shriek which sounded like it was struck between a growl and a snarl.

He walks past the aluminum metal railing festooned with people,
Clinging on to it.
His castle is being erected there,
He has a home at last.

Out of flesh and blood.
Out of hate and pain!
Out of lust and crave,
He erects a castle, out of life!

Desolation studded eyes,
Stare at him!
Echoes of soreness,
Feelings trapped in cement embedment,
Did they add more beauty to the castle?
The cries sounded like music!
He wished man would rot making sex to the railing,
Eat the one next to them when hunger-craved,
While he hunts for more of them,
But the moment seemed more like absurd transcendental mundanity,
He needed more!

More of them to adorn the silver painted ceiling,
A few for the table rods,
The luscious lady’s red juice for the wine cellars pride,
More. More and more!

The most earnest of his desires,
To build his castle,
Outside the wind which enters through the cracked window is tentative.

But then he does not bother,
cause he knew the rotten piece of oxygen breathing murals on the wall would breath out,
If he felt hot!
And so would they quench his thirst
and from their wild choir  he would trap all his desires,
and knot it likely.
Knot the evil, to life!


He conquers all!
Beware! City of sheltered flesh shreds,
A mural out of life,
with cold blood and blue veins ornamenting his castle.
Only the metal railings are done,
He is coming for more!

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  • tears.of.silence
    May 5

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    Wow very intense write here. I like this a lot and how it ended is just wow! I thank you for entering the contest. Unfortunately you've already won a trophy and therefore are being removed from the contest because this breaks the rules. Thanks. kahy


  • arnica karuna
    October 7, 2008

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    Dark and spooky. I loved it all! Scary too. I liked your idea of a castle made of human beings... sounds extremely ruthless and that is why I feel that yours is one of the darkest poems I have got in my contest. I could see him hunting for more people.

    My favorite part:

    "Out of flesh and blood.
    Out of hate and pain!
    Out of lust and crave,
    He erects a castle, out of life!"

    The following line needs correction:
    "While he hunt down for more of them"
    It would be better to read if you could change it to either "While he hunted down more of them" or "While he hunts for more of them"

    Thanks for entering my contest and good luck!


  • takemypainaway
    September 14, 2008
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    I chose this to move on due to the structure and strength in this poem thank you for entering!!

  • Eots
    September 4, 2008
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    Best of luck to you.

    ~Asa of the Grapes of Raisins

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