Continuous questioning has been
taking place in my [ heart ] lately;
one minute you're a bittersweet piece
of strawberry coated candy
with a surprise appealing center
filling the empty spaces in my life
but then by the next second
you've gained an entirely new prerogative
to carefully stack the building blocks
of my discreetly guarded confidence
& initially knock them down
so I'm once more left hopeless and alone ;
rereading love letters penned for you
that will never be placed in your hands.
[I couldn't stop thinking about you]
you had occupied every unused space in my mind
creating my own delusions
& sentimental scenarios
on how we'd turn out in the end
even though we both knew it was over
as soon as this love triangle began.
I vividly recall you passing me in the hallway
high-fives were once 'our' thing
& I lost myself with every smile
directed most importantly for me
rather than the girl you dedicated yourself to
& that's just it
you'll never comprehend
that I lay in a bed full of lies & envy
every night before I close my eyes
& dream about [you]
darling
you've always known
that I've liked my boys a little bit older
& I've seen the jealousy in those eyes
when he calls me 'baby'
even though you damn well know
it would never hold meaning to it
and for the record
me & you
[we weren't together]
you were the one who raised your right hand
& promised yourself to be fully faithful to her
so tell me
for being the quote-on-quote 'great guy'
you talk yourself up to be
how sincere have you really been ?
remember when we'd closely observe each other
from across the dark & smokey room?
I won't deny it
though my fingers are trembling
& my body automatically flinches
everytime your hand moves down my back;
you were flawless to me
you'd just rock back and forth
on the faded pink chair
closely observing my lips
while I sang your favorite song
into the crackling microphone
& our hearts melded into one;
but we've got to bring ourselves
to accept the truth
that's been dangling in front of us
for the past four months
I wish I could be sympathetic
but I can't be too sorry when this abruptly
blows up in your face
& you end up alone without my shoulder to cry on
or her to satisfy your needs
we're just two people lost in a crowded world
& no matter how amazing you make me feel
I need to walk a separate path
and find my way back home.
♥
Author notes
Wednesday: lyric/ quote
'You know i used to spend every day
thinking about you
and dreaming about you,
and everytime you walked by i lost myself,
do you know what that feels like?
And you couldn't possibly know what it feels like
to know that the other person was just toying with you.
Look, i know i shouldn't miss the way you watched me
but you really can't miss the way I always looked at you.'
Sorry. This was mainly a vent kind of. but it relates to the quote =]
I would love to say every one of these words to him.
But I just can't.
YoureNoGoodForMe
Sorry so long =/ It's just how I feel.
A contest entry
- Pick Your Own by Broken-Bones.
450 points, ended September 20, 2008, 36 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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I can relate so much to this stuff sweetie, you're not alone here, don't worry about length it's about feeling that's important, love how you use candy and sweets to describe him inside and how this is sometimes how he is and the next minute, he's the complete opposite. Beautifully wrote hun.
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Excellent write here
Within writing this letter it is in away eased the heart of the pressures that ten to hold one down from such love . Releasing if from ones mind to say jsut exactly what you want toi say .
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Beautifully written dear, a very powerful write indeed.
THank you for ending, and congrats on your trophies. -
I love the lines in italics, it adds another dimension to the poem. I really feel the emotion seeping from the lines... I can personally relate, and yes, whether you want to or not, you must go your separate ways. I didnt want to, and I still wonder to this day whether I should've fought harder for him or not.
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I loved this. I could totally relate even down to your authors comments where you say you have lost your muse, I had a snap moment there. I especially loved the ending of your second stanza, you really captured how our words often don't meet there intended venues. I also loved your final stanza, it was a lovely ending and It seemed to make a real move towards acceptance. This was a nice honest write and it really felt like it was from the heart. Great work x
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awwww
very amazing
i loved it
and i think that the second stanza was my favorite
but i loved it all
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You are such a frikin liar.
Hahahaha, no anyway, I have to disagree with you. Thii one was different because you could see more of your emotion, and personal experience in this. Reminds me of ways that I vent, sometimes people involved deserve to hear it, exactly as we say it. No regrets are necessary.
You say you've lost your muse, yet felt compelled, so compelled that this brilliant work of art emerged from the depths of your mind and soul. -
It hurts so much when the person you have feelings for has them for someone else & worse, they drag you around, making you believe maybe... just maybe, they'll change thier mind, but they are just pulling you along for the ride. I know that feeling, it hurts like hell.
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Ahmazinggg
Whoa, hoe, you are just a fantabulous writer!!! The title stood out to me because of the whole 'love triangle' thing. Too perfect.
Again, I just love how detailed and honest this was. You can write about your emotions with no shame whatsoever, which isn't always easy to do.
*for being the quote-on-quote 'great guy'
you talk yourself up to be
how sincere have you really been?*
HAHAHA that was incredible!!! They seriously all just talk themselves up, and have NOTHING to back it up, lol
*& our hearts melded into one* Ilovedthatimagery...
*I wish I could be sympathetic
but I can't be too sorry when this abruptly
blows up in your face*
He should have known better so in a way...he's got it coming to him.
Stunning right my love ! Franklovesyou:]<3333333
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WOW...this is beyond terrific. It's almost a blend between angry/sad emotions like this is something you'd be yelling, but inside it just keeps asking "Why?"
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