Too late to say goodbye,
farewell, or see you soon.
I cry a million tears.
You were a good, dear friend,
throughout so many years.
Too late to say goodbye,
adieu, or bon voyage.
Why did you have to leave?
You didn't think of that
the rest of us would grieve.
Too late to say goodbye,
so long, or toodeloo.
I wish we had more time,
but you know what is sad?
You died in your life's prime.
Too late to say goodbye,
ta-ta, or cheerio.
Sweet memories remain.
I will go on, and live
in hope we'll meet again.
© Jim T. Henriksen,
September 3rd, 2008.
Author notes
No, nobody close to me has died recently. I just wrote this inspired by a picture, for the contest "Rhyme and Flow part 10 Goodbye" by cricketjeff. To learn more about the Monchielle form, read my main page.
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A contest entry
- Rhyme and Flow part 10 Goodbye - 50,000 points series by cricketjeff.
10000 points, ended September 21, 2008, 28 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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excellent
My favorite form , I love the difficulty of making it work. When done right it's amazing. This was amazing . Each line spoke it's own with the conversation coming full circle in the end. -
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It is nice to hear such words of praise, I am but a humble poet. True, I invented the form, but it still is hard to do right... Thanks for the comment, I appreciate it.
Jim
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Who else can write better than this? I thought I had commented on this earlier (did you delete my comment? hahahaha!!!) Nice and simple and I guess the writer has taken this death well and he see the hope of moving on, living and then sure that one day will meet again.
Nice!
Love and light,
Lencio
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Sincerely,
I *never* delete a comment, unless it is flaming, insulting, or otherwise offensive, and you would never do that (would you?).
No, I didn't delete any comments from you on this, Lencio. Maybe you mix it with another poem (or poet). I think you caught the essence of the poem very well there. The friend who died would be a close friend, who'd love life and never fear death. Thanks for the comment, and your applause, my dear friend.
Jim
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well this is not
so strict on a certain goodbye, so perhaps one day you will share another hello! this is a great way to read your poem,as it is with hope, congrats on the win!!
hobbling along to read more, thanks for sharing
Linda
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Perhaps...
Who knows what may come? For some, death is not the end, but just another state of life. Indeed, you can read the poem with hope, and it is more cheerful. Thanks for comment, and for applause!
Jim
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I love form writing... it's a challenge! Very well penned!
Peace and love
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Thanks,
I love a good challenge myself. When I find a contest that does not specify any special form, I just write what comes to heart, then it will reveal itself in whatever form is natural for the poem. My muse at work. It was like this with the Monchielle form, only that it had not been invented yet when I wrote it.
Thanks for comment, and applause! Jim
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A really lovely and enticing piece, the developing start to each stanza and the overall rhyme and flow make a terrific poem, I shall look at your form later.
Sue and I both want to thank you for your participation in this contest and the series of challenges we have run. There will be new contests coming, so please watch out for them.
All the best and thanks again,
Jeff and Sue
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Thank you!
I was pleasantly surprised to read I won a honorable mention for this poem. I will keep an eye out for new contests from you. You should really take a peek at the Monchielle form, it interests more and more all over the world to try it. Thanks again! Jim
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