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void

in the silence of the night,
        loneliness.
behind these bars,
                      the hammer pounds.
   
    Trapped, no way out, forced to suffer.
             
                                                anchored by these chains,
surronded by these walls,
              can't escape,      can't see,    can't breath,
                                          Darkness has enveloped me.
BY.
      S.W.L.

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  • thesefadingstars.
    September 3, 2008
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    hmmm...very nice....good write....


  • just mercedes gold member
    September 3, 2008
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    Very dark; chains, bars, hammers, walls. Bleak imagery. Small typo line 7 - surrounded.