Sleeping in the car,
Lover by my idle side.
Sunset in the far,
Not worried about the ride.
Open hearts, both reeling,
For eternity we strive.
She asks me how I'm feeling,
I say 'I only feel alive.'
Stresses left behind us,
Champagne love on ice.
Not as romantic to take the bus,
It's just us, and it feels nice.
Fear has never touched our minds,
And love fills both our hearts.
The metal gears, in the car, they grind,
I ignore all my smarts.
Open hearts, both reeling,
For eternity we strive.
She asks me how I'm feeling,
I say 'I only feel alive.'
Driving down the highway,
Only a few clicks left to go.
I want her so very badly now,
But we said wed take it slow.
Open hearts, both reeling,
For eternity we strive.
She asks me how I'm feeling,
I say 'I only feel alive.'
Driving on the night black road,
A car swerves in our lane.
All I see is our car fold,
Like cardboard in the rain.
Open hearts, both reeling,
For eternity we strive.
I ask her how she's feeling,
'Not for long, but still alive.'
I carry her from the totaled car,
And lay her head upon my lap.
The distance she is now away, so far,
Blood dripping like a tap.
I lay upon the twilight road,
Tears and blood mixing on my cheeks.
I see the pearly gates of white and gold,
No longer caring if my eyes now leak.
Open heart, still reeling,
To eternity we arrive.
She asks me how I'm feeling,
I say 'I only feel alive.'
In a list
A contest entry
- My first contest by Karlie67.
600 points, ended September 3, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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i loved the emotion involved in this poem. It made me feel something - peace and love to bitter sweet to peace again. Like life's everyday roller coaster.
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Awwww, wow this is really quite an emotional write. I love how it goes from being romantic to so sad. Very descriptive poem love it. Good luck in the contest!
Karlie
xxx

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Just to point out a typo.
In line 26, I forgot to put a ' in "we'd."



