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I Drew the Line

 

 

I was a painter
I didn't think much of poets
pegged them all as vegetarians
I bowled, I boxed, I mourned
when the Bums left Brooklyn
but I drew the line at tattoos
except the one I have on my shoulder
it says something in fancy latin about trust and duty
an old inscription on an obalesque

then there's a sexy lady, looks like Kim Novak
standing naked in a clam shell, Corinthian columns on each side
and more stuff in small greek letters like little fish crowded all around
(looks like the ocean from a distance)
under that's a Turkish Dagger with the Declaration of Independence
on the blade in Copperplate
and  drops of ruby blood dripping down
the upraised arms of our Lady of Lourdes
whose open heart glows like a candle
the tears on her cheeks real enough to lick
drop to a place where it looks like my skin has popped open
a green King Cobra poking out, forked tongue hissing
diamonds twinkling on the flickering tips
the tail coils around in the small of my back
then curls down to my butt
I showed ma when I came home one time
'But there's nothing about your Mother!', she cried
see what I mean about tattoos
they hurt like a bitch when you get them
they can break an old lady's heart

 

 

 

 

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  • Daizee silver member
    April 14
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    I have one on my shoulder too.. Love the title of this. You went in a completely different direction than what I assumed. That's what I get for assuming.. lol

    Love,
    Stacy


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 16, 2008
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    Some poem!

    I am here at Lane's suggestion. I owe her one. Boi do I owe her one!


  • Grunts Girl gold member
    September 11, 2008

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    I always enjoy the vividness to your writes.. you paint words
    I am too chicken to get a tattoo... if I did it would be of Wile E. Coyote
    I loved the end to this
    so true of so much in life
    I hope you are well


  • malmadre gold member
    September 3, 2008
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    I've always wanted one..haven't you? I just never could decide what, or where to put it. I once sketched some tattoo designs for someone, which included a skull and crossed dongs. He said, that should be yours.
    How did you get through the Navy without one, I don't remember seeing any? Was all of what you speak of, covered 'neath your paint spattered shirts? I love the poem.

  • Cat gold member
    September 3, 2008
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    i love this piece, the irony- the rich imagery, the story that sorta ebbs through
    the solid face of your mother, a mother- wanting to be memorialized
    or the poem memorializing her is just as poignant (maybe more so)

    just a wonderful piece told in your strong voice.


    m


  • myrataal silver member
    September 2, 2008
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    Wow.

    It is rather ... funny. I mean, I simply could not visualize you dressed in this tattoo. I think you took a big brush and blocked my eyesight totally with one layer of thick black oil paint in one deft stroke.

    Venus is well presented and I recognize even the Holy Grail in here ...

    But ... Butt?

    How could you do that to your mother?


  • catz Moderators member
    September 2, 2008

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    For some reason this poem touches me. No not the prick of the tattooist's needle or the open heart of our Lady of Lourdes. It must be the vision of your Ma, dissappointment in her eyes, tears in her heart. Dang it David, you could at least have had a tattoo for her... maybe a small heart with flowers and her name, 'Ma' across it. Us Ma's are touched by things like that, even if we don't like tattoos.

    Actually, I think your poem is delightfully reminiscent of times gone by, times of youth and carefree days, tattoos with words we don't understand, moments hidden away until we happen to find them once again in our reverie.

    And still we draw the line.

    Excellent piece, David. I likes

    Dee

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