The beach was calling my name,
so I walked down ancient dunes and
around castles built with meticulous hands,
to the opening of the ocean water.
A tender breeze carried the smell of salt
and new beginnings towards my nose.
The sand felt cold for once underneath my sunburned feet,
but I was so used to the chilliness from the way you treated me,
that by now it was almost welcome.
You always reminded me how strong you were,
being a Marine and all.
You said you weren’t scared of anything.
Back then I believed those words,
so carefully tuned, that they were almost enough
to make me lose myself again.
But some deep intuition always knew that you
would go back to her.
That was okay with me.
Because I ran into you today, suddenly,
and when I looked at you, I saw a forty year old man’s body
trapped with a nineteen year old boy’s mind.
And that’s when I realized that you would be scared forever.
Being with her, stealing bits and pieces from everyone’s lives,
would never be enough for someone who lived off so much greed.
I crouched down in the sand and drew a heart not for you,
but for all the people you will scar along the way.
Then I walked off, letting the shells dig into my feet,
and the seas carry you away from me, for good.
I always reminded you that you could never break me.
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So I Will Run
"First Day Of School Blues"
A contest entry
- Lots Of Options by stargazer..
525 points, ended December 27, 2008, 33 entries
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i think this one is my favorite so far. i just can't stop reading your work. you're very talented.
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You have done it again. To me this doesn't feel like blues so much as a faded heartache. It's like she's totally over him, but it still hurts, just a little bit.
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The same blues i felt when i went back to school.
Beautiful last line and i loved the whole thing together.
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OHMYGAWD.
Where is this inspiration COMING from? I definitely know who this is about, and darling, it is fabulous & very well written. I love how this is more of a personal piece, holding so much pain & emotions & hatred toward him, in which he deserves, because he's nothing more than a face, like you always tell me :] We just have to remember that sometimes.
-You said you weren’t scared of anything.
Back then I believed those words,
so carefully tuned, that they were almost enough
to make me lose myself again.
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Hahhh ! Those lines, wow. Definitely remind me of a certain somebody who I am finally over ;] He used to tell me that, too. I also loved the "they were almost enough to make me lose myself again." Holy geez. Perfectly worded, & very relatable. Loveloveloveee it
-And that’s when I realized that you would be scared forever.
Being with her, stealing bits and pieces from everyone’s lives,
would never be enough for someone who lived off so much greed.
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Wow. Never realized how similar they were until I read this poem. Hah. Incredibly penned lines there. Definitely my favorites. Gah, and can I just say that you are becoming a perfectionist at imagery ? It's beautiful =] Keep it up, dearesttt. I freaking love this poem ♥
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Beautiful Poem!!I love how u wrote it!! Great Job!!
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imagery and emotion - with both, they were penned great
fabulous poem
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