On the cliff-edge, we sat,
swashing our legs to watery song
The nights we would sit there,
in company with the moon
I danced with you, beneath the stars
fallen stars, around you
The air swayed with mystery,
the fate of the sea was that mystery
You banished my fears with your own
We stood still, together, silent
Your pain kept me, on that cliff
You were overtaken, taken with the sea
Without reluctance , you chose to leap,
to leave me, on our cliff
Burning with intensity
I dissolved in the murk of your shadow
The rocks tore me open,
they ripped through my silence
Ache rained down and froze my soul
I gasped for air
The silence watched me cry
Was death my only life?
I wrenched and fell, broken
It seemed my only choice
Author notes
http://donjuki.deviantart.com/art/Silence-32340296 Picture inspired contest
A contest entry
- My first contest (pretty simple you should enter *wink*) by kistoclou.
795 points, ended September 20, 2008, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - the voices... by thesefadingstars..
360 points, ended October 11, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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beautifuly sad Wow tugged the heart strings
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oh, ouch.
having experienced something similar, i really felt this one.
thanks for entering.
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'the road of excess leads to the palace of wisdom' william blake
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This is so sad! It's like Romeo and Juliet, except.. more modern in a way. I can relate to your story here, being so in love with someone that if they leave, leaving with them would be your only choice. You write aobut love in a truly beautiful way.
Congratulations.
Good luck in the contest.
Chin up,
Swim.x -
the story line in this is great.
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"Death makes angels of us all
And gives us wings
Where we had shoulders
Smooth as raven's Claws"
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This is beautiful in a way that you look on into the sky and push aside the conscious thoughts that someone somewhere died in that moment because someone gave up on them, and it makes you regain yourself strongly and softly with the no-doubt reassurance that you will never ever let down those who are constantly beside you. There are so many lovely things in this poem that conjure up somber imagery. "The silence watched me cry / Was death my only life?" The paradox in that line is overwhelming, but I have to sit and wonder just how many people have wandered across that thought and not known what it was or meant. Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful!
Brit
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