If I should choose but one moment
of worldly, wondrous bliss
then it would be that moment ....
that moment when we stole
our perfect, only kiss
and that, my love, is all because of miracles
and this ....
You came to me in starlight
at the midnight of my lust
and stroked my soul with gentle winds
that turned my vows to dust
I watched your beauty silhouette
as you bathed in moonlight’s glow
your eyes were saying everything
my spirit dreamed to know
and I danced with you, insatiable,
at the midnight of your breath -
through whispered words on starlight winds
that smoked my soul to death
(with just one fragile whisper of nothing more
than “yes”)
“Yes, kiss me” you said
and that strangely human, simple act
unleashed no less than this ....
A white flare of magnesium
scorched Earth within our hearts
as passion soared and nothing sought
to tear our lips apart
We tasted love upon our tongues
we burned our clasp of skin
‘till fragrance drowned my sanity
in love locked pools within
One second to a billion years
and every hour inside
was captured in that coupling
of lips and hearts and minds
One kiss to weave such ecstasy
from heaven’s rarest trace
still drapes my time eternally
in thoughts of our embrace
Yes ....
that moment is so much to me
that kiss still fires my breath
how I pray for one more taste of you
before my hour of death
as between the dawning universe
and its furthest, fading light
just nothing means as much to me
as kissing you that night.
A contest entry
- What Is A Kiss by nevadapoet.
700 points, ended September 8, 2008, 50 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Without You. by Poetryintheblood.
450 points, ended September 26, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Fav Me by SomeonesToySoldier.
2625 points, ended October 8, 2008, 33 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Glitter-Covered Masks Hide The Shame... by Silly Rabbit..
300 points, ended October 16, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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It flowed so well and every word meant something I could really see it all happening in my minds eye.... You really had me from the first line, I was kind of upset it finished you know, I got so submerged it reminded me of some of my old memories and really brought them back to life for me so thank you.
One kiss to weave such ecstasy
from heaven’s rarest trace
still drapes my time eternally
in thoughts of our embrace
I remember that feeling alot..... It's the best feeling ever...
I'm gonna take a look at your other works
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A wee to long to be Yates...
but i think you have Shakespeare on the run here my brother.
The stanza after ...yes!
just a jaw dropper....
I thought romance was dead.
You have rectified that old thought.
Just a brilliant piece of classic poetry.
You are a poet indeed!
Peace,
LOWELL POE
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This is wonderful. My favourite line was 'One second to a billion years, and every hour inside.', I really think that's true, time seems so long. Congrats on a truly brillient write and good luck in all your future pieces.
SV
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Wonderful description, breath taking imagery. I feel the kiss instead of merely seeing it. This is a masterpiece to that strangely human act of kissing.
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Wow.
I'm amazed at the way you described these deep feelings and reactions with such eloquence. The rhythm was perfect and immediately created a great flow in my mind (it somehow reminded me of Poe's "The Raven"...don't know why) and your imagery was incredible. My favorite line is definitely "at the midnight of your breath." Fantastic. My only critique would be your use of .... but the more I look at it and re-read the poem the more I realize how much it works.
All in all, a superb piece.
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Hmm I'm not even totally sure what to say here other than i really enjoyed it. its an incredable write and I really have nothing to critique. Bravo and thanks for entering my contest.
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Great stuff
Not heard from you for a while so am doubly delighted to read your entries, this is defnitiely well worth reading
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This is absolutely beautiful in every word, thank you for sharing such depth and beauty with me, good luck in my contest, Josie
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WOW
Fantastic poem! Congrats! Incredible vocabulary & weaving of words.
Poesy
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Congratulations on the gold, you obviously hit the right chords in the hearts of woman who have read it. A majestic romantic piece. Well done.
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beautiful fireworks and passion
i like how you reuse the word midnight and starlight in sort of nonconventional ways. i don't really like how you use "no more and no less" and then "no less" again. it sounds pedestrian compared with the rest of the poem.
the "a white flare of magnesium" stanza turns into an explosion of beautiful fireworks and passion. amazing.
in the last stanza i would take out the word "just." i know it's picky, but this is so great of a poem that if you're going to get any critique it has to be super fucking picky.
great job though. usually poems about kissing are boring and cheesy. but not this one.
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AWESOME
WOW...I am torn by this piece...I have read most of the contest entries and have choosen what I thought was the best of the best...and then I read this. This write is full of promise, hope, passion, longing, desire and love...if only we all could remember and word so elequantely the first kiss of our lives that remains a burning memory for all of our lives. This write has a great flow...like a feather being blown around from a gentle breeze..your perfectly choosen words have delicately kissed my heart.
"A white flare of magnesium
scorched Earth within our hearts
as passion soared and nothing sought
to tear our lips apart
We tasted love upon our tongues
we burned our clasp of skin
‘till fragrance drowned my sanity
in love locked pools within"
how truely beautiful, powerful and peaceful...to feel so much in such a simple moment that changes a life forever.
"One second to a billion years
and every hour inside
was captured in that coupling
of lips and hearts and minds"
Strong imagery...a perfect statement describing all time...I love "a billion years and every hour inside"
This write is second to none...my definate choice for a gold trophy...Well done, well penned and a perfect winner for the best description of what a kiss is...whoever you wrote this for must be very special and should feel very special after reading this. I know I would cherish it for a lifetime.
Again...great job.
Nevadapoet
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I was thrilled to bits to win gold in your superb contest. I've been overwhelmed by the response to this piece, something that I wasn't expecting at all (and didn't really think it deserved - if truth be known). Anyway, it's my birthday today and this is a fantastic, surprise pressie. L&P, Kx
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What a surprise!
I think this may be your best poem! I absolutely adore it.
"You came to me at starlight
in the midnight of my lust
and stroked my soul with gentle winds
that turned my vows to dust"
- That has got to be the most inventive, beautiful way to describe the beginning of an affair. Shakespeare would be envious!
"and that strangely human, simple act
unleashed no less than this..."
- Something about those lines just really appeals to me. Maybe it's the way they have a sort of playful rhythm, maybe it's the description of a kiss as being "strangely human" and "simple" - which are startlingly creative yet such obvious ways to explain it.
"A white flare of magnesium
scorched Earth within our hearts
as passion soared and nothing sought
to tear our lips apart"
- I absolutely LOVE your use of "magnesium" and "scorched Earth" here. I have used "scorched Earth" before in relation to a poem about passion, all though it was a bit more negative in tone and subjec than this. "Magnesium", however, was a very clever and perfect scientific word to interject right there. Something I would never have thought of, so it impresses me to no end. Nice use of gentle alliteration with "scorched", "soared", and "sought".
"We tasted love upon our tongues
we burned our clasp of skin
'till fragrance drowned my sanity
in love locked pools within"
- Have I mentioned yet that you are a master of rhythm and rhyme? This is perfect! I also love the last line "in love locked pools within" - something about that is just so... introspective and stunning.
Then that ending stanza, with my favorite line "that kiss still fires my breath" - well damn!!! When do I get a kiss like that????
Actually, I have had a kiss like that - and it from the same person I wrote the poem with the "scorched Earth" metaphor about. So, interesting connection there.
But his was a kiss that would burn you up inside and destroy you.
I thought the addition of "before my hour of death" was interesting. Made me think of... Queen Anne of England for some reason. Or others who have died for love, often killed by their love...
That line gives it a more historical feel than modern - at least for me. Which only makes me love the poem that much more.
This is just a brilliant poem. A gem among river stones. One of a kind....
I hope you don't mind if I add this to a new list I'm going to do called "Favorites by my Favorites"
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Receiving a comment like this is akin to Kylie Minogue pinning me down and begging! I don’t know if I can cope (but I’ll try!).
I have yet to work out how to say thank you loudly enough. Allie, I would be truly honoured to feature in your list.
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LOL... well I don't pretend to be as beautiful as Kylie, but hopefully my comment and I will do for now!
Of course, I owe you about twenty comments like this, don't I?
I better get to work! LOL.
You really deserve it. This is my favorite of all the poems I've ever read - EVER.
Which means, you are damn good. My favorite poets are Edna St. Vincent Millay, Sylvia Plath, Robert Browning, Ted Hughes, Christina Rosetti, and others...
yet you far surpassed them all with this one.
This should DEFINITELY be published! -
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This will more than do, lol!
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