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The child who could be

Dribble words across the desk
stumble and blurt
staring at the cobwebs in the corner

she is all ears
drawing me in
wisdom and empathy awash

minutes gone
I toggle down stairs, all loose limbed
empty and vague

and "Don't even look at me"
Not that way, not any way.

Street too horrible with shopping people and squawking business

I need a cave
a roaring sea
a bit of a storm to dance in
to shout at

but find a bookshop to slide into
lurk in the second hand aisles
uninhabited Natural History

and crouch crumpled on the floor
retching up inchoate fears and dreams
into raggy gnarls of words

regaling futures I could so easily succumb to
or be drowned
so willingly sacrificing
and enjoying

even right now if blood chances on this place

imagine consequences
that would wrench my sleep
with cries and greed
hurtling me down one way paths
chained and bonded to just the one future.

I write it all on the blank page at the back of a mammoth tome
on mammoth bone
...and all the things I had locked inside just moments ago
up those stairs

Purged
I want to face them all again

Out into the street
gloriously emptied of goaded humanity

Into a storm

I laugh and shout, praise the sky
for the lunks of water straggling my hair and skin

I stamp in the puddles
rhythmic pattern and word
being the small child


whom I have not yet done with.


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I have never had "counselling" but imagine this is how I would feel if I had!

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  • CaliOkie silver member
    December 7, 2008

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    This has the most wonderful texture. There is an honesty and naturalistic expression here that cuts through all the usual bullshit stuff. No artifacts of the "too clever" poet, no pretense. Very solid, very real.

    I need a cave
    a roaring sea
    a bit of a storm to dance in
    to shout at

    This I love in particular. Something very essential in your words.

    Excellent.



    Garrison

  • a n e s t h e s ia
    November 24, 2008

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    I don't know why I never commented on this. As it is, I love it. . and will edit this comment when I can think of something to say.

    • Afxb
      November 24, 2008
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      Thankyou...I enjoyed writing this poem ...because the action came straight from my imagination....having been given the story outline by you.

  • x26ss
    September 9, 2008
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    I think I know now why I like your work so much. I can identify with the author.

    • Afxb
      September 29, 2008
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      As She says the inspiration was a morning in her life which I picked up and interpreted....and felt I was there.
      So God knows who you identify with!!!


    • logorrhoea
      September 29, 2008
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      Hi..that's slightly confused lol.

      -this was something written in response to a morning of mine a while back- but he's made it very much his own- good with urban scenarios..
      .... so you might identify with me too.. in a twisted kind of way ..
      By the way I've done nothing here..

      peace.


  • logorrhoea
    September 2, 2008
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    I appreciate the essence

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