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"Clever" she says.....


"Clever..." she says casting me that coi smile
and I..I..I just feel like everything is different now.
from the way things used to be, with myself pulling down on me
but the one thing that distracts is she...loves with her heart
and not just with what she sees.
That lovely girl with the questioning blue eyes,
the one that stands...just there!...holding that ugly.bleeding.fragile.thing.
That just so happens to be a heart...and its mine,I do believe.
At times she looks as though...shes plagued with sadness like the crow
And I wish that i could know...just what her silence means...
Just what that silence means!!! I search my brain and I watch her lips
My eyes leave her face to trace her hips...and we talk of things like
acid trips and safey safes and "fat" spelled with a ph and nothing seems to make sense!!!
And everything chooses to commense with this natural intoxication so intense
What is really killing me...the love or the suspense?
Let me prepare a case with her for my own defense! And im sure we will laugh,
quite certain we will cry,all that I know is her smile gets me so high!!
I would never leave her..no not again...( Sorry about that )
*Stares into your eyes and places my index finger on your chin*
I want you right now just like I wanted you then.
The night we went on that journey and kissed in the autumn rain
and everytime I see you cry my blood turns into pain...my heart colliding with
the neurons in my brain...please just let me hold you while we both go insane.
I`ll be here forever so please dont think that I will leave...
I know that in my past I was stupid and naive. 

But here we are now..and my hearts on my sleeve.

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I was thinking about somethings...and this is what came to mind.

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  • Great

    I realy like this,it has a nice poetic flow, yet with this added hectic output that adds to the feel of a realistic confesion.


  • movedon
    April 13
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    Great imagery! Coi is not a word though, did you mean coy? I love the way you described every single new emotion that flooded your heart, it was like a musical slur, one that never stopped coming.Thanks for taking the time to enter my contest, and I apologize for me delay in judging! Best of luck!


  • ashley-dani
    March 24
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    You're right I do love it!!! Wow this is AWESOME!!! It is so beautiful. "The night we went on that journey and kissed in the autumn rain" I loved that part. And even though you probably didn't mean it to be funny, the little side note of (Sorry About That) was pretty funny. Made me laugh cause it sounds liek something I would say. But keep up your amazign writing!


  • individuality gold member
    March 23

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    ah well we have to let sadness in when it arives so it can run its course, then we can smile and move on to other days where hopefully joy dances.


  • LovelyLauren
    February 24

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    Absolutely Fantastic

    And everything chooses to commense with this natural intoxication so intense
    What is really killing me...the love or the suspense? .... This is amazing. I love it.


  • blair1994
    February 12
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    WOW!

    That Is Amazing Meg! I Love It.....Your Amazing I Love You Hun!

  • And everything chooses to commense with this natural intoxication so intense
    What is really killing me...the love or the suspense?
    Let me prepare a case with her for my own defense! And im sure we will laugh,

    humz, philosophical
    superb and some really deep thoughts, im liking your poetry more than ever before
    by
    The poet of hearts and beautiful words


  • Beloved one
    January 12

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    I wonder if this is a fiction write just made up
    only never say forever, cause you never know
    I would say a sweet write with lot`s of feeling


  • stargazer.
    December 16, 2008
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    forgot the clappies


  • stargazer.
    December 16, 2008
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    This poem was really interesting i loved the concept it and i also loved where you threw in the rhyming
    you have a brilliant way of wording things and your vocabulary I enjoyed reading it from the beginning to the end.
    I loved lines 9 and 10 for your first line i think its suppose to be "coy" instead of "coi".


  • PuRfekly-Phlaw3d
    September 9, 2008
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    amazing

    i love it..

  • The.poet.of.hearts
    September 6, 2008
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    ohh forgot Applause

  • The.poet.of.hearts
    September 6, 2008
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    Shall comment tonight

    Crazy girl !!!!!!!!

    you forgot your Crazy boy :

  • Bob Fox
    September 2, 2008

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    Megan

    To be aware of mistakes and so compasion . The sign of a good heart and you the poet of talent makes this reader more aware of what it takes. BTW thanks for reading my poem

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